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Wenneguen Posted 15 years ago
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[Correction] Text about science and happiness
Hi,
could you please tell me what is not correct in this text and how I could enhance it ? I underlined the parts I'm particularly not sure about.
Scientist's happiness
As an astronomer, my happiness firstly consists of contemplating the beauty of the the universe, physical as well as conceptual, its harmony and its unity. Indeed, physical laws apply everywhere, and phenomena are now thought to be the expression of one unique superforce.
Hapiness is also found when discovering something : it provides a great relief after a lot of work as well as the pride to experience the unknown.
However, science is not enough to make us happy : we need some inner transformation to reach serenity. Alone, science is neutral and do not express any moral values : this is why we need spirituality, which I think can still be based on science.
The planetary point of view provided by scientific history underlines that, beyond our differences, environmental issues concern all of us.
Thank you !
could you please tell me what is not correct in this text and how I could enhance it ? I underlined the parts I'm particularly not sure about.
Scientist's happiness
As an astronomer, my happiness firstly consists of contemplating the beauty of the the universe, physical as well as conceptual, its harmony and its unity. Indeed, physical laws apply everywhere, and phenomena are now thought to be the expression of one unique superforce.
Hapiness is also found when discovering something : it provides a great relief after a lot of work as well as the pride to experience the unknown.
However, science is not enough to make us happy : we need some inner transformation to reach serenity. Alone, science is neutral and do not express any moral values : this is why we need spirituality, which I think can still be based on science.
The planetary point of view provided by scientific history underlines that, beyond our differences, environmental issues concern all of us.
Thank you !
Top answer
Hello Wenneguen, welcome to English Forums and thanks for registering. As an astronomer, my greatest happiness is in contemplating the physical and conceptual beauty of the universe as found in its harmony and unity. Indeed, physical laws apply everywhere, and phenomena are now thought to be the expression of one unique superforce.
- Hello Wenneguen, welcome to English Forums and thanks for registering.
- As an astronomer, my greatest happiness is in contemplating the physical and conceptual beauty of the universe as found in its harmony and unity.
- Indeed, physical laws apply everywhere, and phenomena are now thought to be the expression of one unique superforce.
- Happiness is also found when discovering something : it provides a great relief after a lot of work as well as the pride to experience the unknown.
- Are you speaking about yourself?
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Hello Wenneguen, welcome to English Forums and thanks for registering.
As an astronomer, my greatest happiness is in contemplating the physical and conceptual beauty of the universe as found in its harmony and unity. Indeed, physical laws apply everywhere, and phenomena are now thought to be the expression of one unique superforce.
As an astronomer, my greatest happiness is in contemplating the physical and conceptual beauty of the universe as found in its harmony and unity. Indeed, physical laws apply everywhere, and phenomena are now thought to be the expression of one unique superforce.
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Ok thank you, it looks better ! But you mean " espouse " and not " expouse ", right ?
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sorry - my mistake.
espouse |i'spouz|
verb [ trans. ]
1 adopt or support (a cause, belief, or way of life) : she espoused universal love.
espouse |i'spouz|
verb [ trans. ]
1 adopt or support (a cause, belief, or way of life) : she espoused universal love.
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