Correction possible?

Hi,

I was trying to get more information on how to better write a reflection paper and came upon Susan Lewis' reflection paper addressed to Pastor Park. It was online. Would it possible to correct her Sunday, August 1 entry? She seems to have a very good knowledge of working vocabulary? and seeing how it could be corrected (if there are any to be corrected would do me good, I think). It would be difficult to paraphrase her writing and that wouldn't be good. I am especially keen on knowing how to properly use tenses when one is supposed to be writing a reflection paper at the end of the day or whatever time line there is.

Sunday, August 1st:

Today was the first day of the Spiritual Journey program. The first stop on this journey was the . The reality that I was going to ...to live... for 5 months has not yet set in. As I met the other participants of the program I couldn’t help but think about how different all of our experiences with adoption have been. After hearing just little bits of their stories I really feel that I have been blessed by God with my adoptive family. Growing up I always felt like adoption was a great thing and I was so thankful for my family. I have only felt gratitude to . My anger has mostly been towards and the Korean people because I have felt that they abandoned their children. Hearing about less joyful experiences of other adoptees in America has opened my eyes to the fact that the good and bad of adoption has been the product of both Korea and . I think this trip is really going to help me to begin to understand ’s side of the adoption story. I think through this trip God is going to challenge me to an even deeper level of forgiveness.