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Mohamed Yehia Posted 13 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Correction Please !!!!
I am glad to introduce myself. My name`s Sarah. I’ve just graduated from the University of ….. with a bachelor degree in Hotel Management .
I have 3-month experience in front office department at Sofitel towers and casino. I’ve gained a good knowledge and skills about front office operation that included arranging and attending presentation, working with clients and identifying the frequent problems and how to deal with it. Make a check in and out to the guest, telephone handling and room orientation. I`ve also a good background of the property management system .i had been working on opera reservation system during my summer training.
I had a front office training course for 45 hours with Mr. John Alexander. He was a front office manager at Novotel Hotel. This course was sponsored by the American Hotel and Lodging Assocation.i had given a certificate and pin as mark of professionalism had also many courses related to the hospitality industry such as food safety , food and beverage, leadership and housekeeping
My short term goal is to get a good job and my long term goal is to be a hotel manager and professional trainer
My hobbies are listening to music, reading book and playing chess.
My weaknesses are
I trust people very easily which is I think a negative for me
It takes me a longtime to get ready in the morning, so I set my alarm one hour a head of my time in for work.
My strengths
I’m quick to learn, self-confident and highly motivated .i work hard, am a good team player and love challenges.
I`m holding ICDL license. I had training in a small company of web design and development and I am able to create and design a websites .I was assistant IT of tourism student development association where communication and teamwork where essential qualities. It is an association which helps student to gain skills before the graduation.
When I was doing my summer training in Front office department .I faced a lot of pressure. I worked many times two-shifts to cover my co-workers who are in an urgent situation.
if you have any other suggestion on vocabulary or grammar usage . please let me know . Thank you very much
I have 3-month experience in front office department at Sofitel towers and casino. I’ve gained a good knowledge and skills about front office operation that included arranging and attending presentation, working with clients and identifying the frequent problems and how to deal with it. Make a check in and out to the guest, telephone handling and room orientation. I`ve also a good background of the property management system .i had been working on opera reservation system during my summer training.
I had a front office training course for 45 hours with Mr. John Alexander. He was a front office manager at Novotel Hotel. This course was sponsored by the American Hotel and Lodging Assocation.i had given a certificate and pin as mark of professionalism had also many courses related to the hospitality industry such as food safety , food and beverage, leadership and housekeeping
My short term goal is to get a good job and my long term goal is to be a hotel manager and professional trainer
My hobbies are listening to music, reading book and playing chess.
My weaknesses are
I trust people very easily which is I think a negative for me
It takes me a longtime to get ready in the morning, so I set my alarm one hour a head of my time in for work.
My strengths
I’m quick to learn, self-confident and highly motivated .i work hard, am a good team player and love challenges.
I`m holding ICDL license. I had training in a small company of web design and development and I am able to create and design a websites .I was assistant IT of tourism student development association where communication and teamwork where essential qualities. It is an association which helps student to gain skills before the graduation.
When I was doing my summer training in Front office department .I faced a lot of pressure. I worked many times two-shifts to cover my co-workers who are in an urgent situation.
if you have any other suggestion on vocabulary or grammar usage . please let me know . Thank you very much
Top answer
Please let me introduce myself. My name is Sarah. (better not to use an unnecessary contraction in a letter of this type) ...
- Please let me introduce myself.
- My name is Sarah.
- (better not to use an unnecessary contraction in a letter of this type) ...
- a bachelor's degree ....
- I have had three months of experience in the front office of Sofitel Towers and Casino.
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Please let me introduce myself. My name is Sarah. (better not to use an unnecessary contraction in a letter of this type) ... a bachelor's degree ....
I have had three months of experience in the front office of Sofitel Towers and Casino. (note the use of articles; also capital letters in the name).
I have gained good knowledge and skills in front office o
I have had three months of experience in the front office of Sofitel Towers and Casino. (note the use of articles; also capital letters in the name).
I have gained good knowledge and skills in front office o
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Thank you very much , indeed . actually im just preparing for an interview. Im wondering if the correction you did can be used in a conversation regardless of capitalization mistakes ...
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I re-writing the sentence , could you please tell if it makes sense.
I was assistant IT of tourism student development model in the college where communication and teamwork where essential qualities. It is a model which mainly focuses on developing the skills of undergraduate Students in an efficient and practical way,consistent with providing training courses
I was assistant IT of tourism student development model in the college where communication and teamwork where essential qualities. It is a model which mainly focuses on developing the skills of undergraduate Students in an efficient and practical way,consistent with providing training courses
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Hi Sarah. I don't know what an "assistant IT" is; and most likely, neither will the person that you talk to. If you can clarify what this means, I can help you find the right words to express it.
Regards,
David.
Regards,
David.
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Hey , David .
Thank you very much . IT stands for information technology and i was assistant in that department of the college model .
Thank you very much . IT stands for information technology and i was assistant in that department of the college model .
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Hi Sarah,
Yes, everyone knows what IT stands for, I guess. The problem is that you placed the adjective after the noun, which made the meaning hard to guess. You could say "I was an IT assistant" and it would be OK. Or, you could even say "I was an assistant in the IT department". Either would be OK.
Good luck. When will your interview be?
Best wishes,
David.
Yes, everyone knows what IT stands for, I guess. The problem is that you placed the adjective after the noun, which made the meaning hard to guess. You could say "I was an IT assistant" and it would be OK. Or, you could even say "I was an assistant in the IT department". Either would be OK.
Good luck. When will your interview be?
Best wishes,
David.
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Hmm, no I've just re-read the original sentence, and realised it wasn't the IT department. Looks like you'd best go with the first option then.
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Thank you very much ,David.you're such a nice man . I`m about to travel to Dubai soon .
I corrected it .dose it make sense ?
I was an assistant in IT department of tourism student development model in the college where communication and teamwork where essential qualities. It is a model which mainly works and focuses on developing the skills of undergraduate Students in an effici
I corrected it .dose it make sense ?
I was an assistant in IT department of tourism student development model in the college where communication and teamwork where essential qualities. It is a model which mainly works and focuses on developing the skills of undergraduate Students in an effici
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I'm not sure whether "model" is the right word. Maybe it is; I just haven't heard it used this way.
You need to say "the IT department", and "a college". Also, the way you use "consistent with" isn't quite right.
Does this seem better to you? I'm not sure whether it's 100% what you're trying to say.
I was an assistant in the IT department of a tourism
You need to say "the IT department", and "a college". Also, the way you use "consistent with" isn't quite right.
Does this seem better to you? I'm not sure whether it's 100% what you're trying to say.
I was an assistant in the IT department of a tourism
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