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Thiago Hoffart Posted 11 years ago
Grammar

correction of my composition

Hello everybody, I started writing some compositions to improve my English, and I will be very happy if you could appoint the mistakes that I have made. So here it is

Padóca it’s a very good bakery, located in tatuapé, the bakery is open twenty-four hours per day, so it can save you when it’s already dawn and you don’t have nowhere to eat, besides having a delicious food, you won’t have to eat processed food in the fast foods around here.

Talking about the food, everything here is delicious and very cheap for a twenty-four hour establishment, you can ask for a traditional “Americano”, which is a sandwich made with cheese, tomato, salad, ham and eggs, and it’s just eight reais, but if you is passing for a hard time, you can ask for a ‘’Croissant” for three reais. However, the best part for me is the candies, there is a lot of kinds in the bakery, “Brigadeiro”, “Ana Carolina”, “Beijinho”,”Bomba de brigadeiro” and all of them are really good, literally mouth-watering!

The establishment is incredibly friendly, all the employees are extremely gentle, they even put more candies that you asked for free, because there are just a few people in the bakery in the dawn and they simply don’t care. All this characteristics conquered me, making this bakery a special establishment that I can go after I return of my parties and eat a lot, or a place to go in my dawns awake.

i am very grateful since now! thanks!
  

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Thiago Hoffart if you could appoint the mistakes if you could point out the mistakes Thiago Hoffart Padóca it’s a very good bakery, Padóca it’s a very good bakery. Thiago Hoffart located in tatuapé , the bakery is open twenty-four hours per day, so it can save you when it’s already dawn and you don’t have nowhere to eat, Located in Tatuapé , it is open twenty-four hours a day, so it can save you when it’s already dawn and you don’t have somewhere to eat. Thiago Hoffart besides having a delicious food, you won’t have to eat processed food in the fast foods around here.

  • Thiago Hoffart if you could appoint the mistakes if you could point out the mistakes Thiago Hoffart Padóca it’s a very good bakery, Padóca it’s a very good bakery.
  • Thiago Hoffart located in tatuapé , the bakery is open twenty-four hours per day, so it can save you when it’s already dawn and you don’t have nowhere to eat, Located in Tatuapé , it is open twenty-four hours a day, so it can save you when it’s already dawn and you don’t have somewhere to eat.
  • Thiago Hoffart besides having a delicious food, you won’t have to eat processed food in the fast foods around here.
  • Besides having delicious food, you won’t have to eat processed food in the fast food shops around here.
  • Thiago Hoffart , you can ask for a traditional “Americano”, which is a sandwich made with cheese, tomato, salad, ham and eggs, and it’s just eight reais You can ask for a traditional “Americano”, which is a sandwich made with cheese, tomato, salad, ham and eggs, and it’s just eight Reais.
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Thiago Hoffartif you could appoint the mistakes
if you could point out the mistakes
Thiago HoffartPadóca it’s a very good bakery,
Padóca it’s a very good bakery.
Thiago Hoffartlocated in tatuapé
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AnonymousThe meaning of this is unclear.
I meant to say, if you don't have money, passing through difficulties in your life or something like that, You could ask for a cheaper sandwich, so I used the expression hard time because i couldn't found another better expression in my mind.

I am very grateful for your time. You have clarified some doubt
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Thiago HoffartI meant to say, if you don't have money, passing through difficulties in your life or something like that, You could ask for a cheaper sandwich, so I used the expression hard time because i couldn't found another better expression in my mind.
In that case, you can write if you don't have much money.
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i am an English learner as well, if i made any errors. feel free to correct my mistake.
First paragraph
Padóca it’s a very good bakery, located in tatuapé (you dont need it's when you already introduced Padoca and you dont need the comma to continue the sentences.
you don’t have nowhere to eat, ( you don't need "don't" when you already said nowhere to eat)
you won’t have to eat pr

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