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Simplythebest Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

Correction of a sentence

Hi,

I am wondering if this sentence sounds okay.




I would like to avail four days vacation this summer by taking every Friday off commencing from this week. Your approval is requested for these dates.

July 10, 17, 24 & 31

Thanks,

Shantel

  

Top answer

Sounds a bit too strained and formal to me. Better: I would like to use four days of vacation this summer by taking every Friday off, starting this week. Your approval is requested for these dates: July 10, 17, 24, and 31.

— Anonymous

  • Sounds a bit too strained and formal to me.
  • Better: I would like to use four days of vacation this summer by taking every Friday off, starting this week.
  • Your approval is requested for these dates: July 10, 17, 24, and 31.
  • If you want a more direct version, try changing the second sentence to the active voice.
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Sounds a bit too strained and formal to me.

Better:
I would like to use four days of vacation this summer by taking every Friday off, starting this week. Your approval is requested for these dates: July 10, 17, 24, and 31.

If you want a more direct version, try changing the second sentence to the active voice.
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