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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
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Correction - English/Grammer

"Since it was first created on December 1782 by the Montgolfier brothers, a hot air balloon has been widely used as a popular aircraft that makes one the oldest human dream come true. Furthermore it is currently known to be the safest aircraft in the world because of its principle of work. Although the balloon experienced a lot of changes in its history, the structure and basic principle of balloon are still quite simple."

I think this paragraph requires proofreading...

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Issues: 1. You're talking about hot air balloons in general, not one specific balloon. 2.

— Anonymous

  • Issues: 1.
  • You're talking about hot air balloons in general, not one specific balloon.
  • 2.
  • "Principle of work" is not quite the right phrase 3.
  • Your second sentence is a little repetitive with "popular" and "widely used", but I don't want to tell you what phrases to keep.
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Issues:
1. You're talking about hot air balloons in general, not one specific balloon.
2. "Principle of work" is not quite the right phrase
3. Your second sentence is a little repetitive with "popular" and "widely used", but I don't want to tell you what phrases to keep.
4. The changes are ongoing, I assume. Ballooning is not static.

Consider the following revision:
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DoNotPassGo1. You're talking about hot air balloons in general, not one specific balloon.
True, but it's possible to use singular forms as a generalisation. 'The hot air balloon has been around for over two centuries.'

In the sentences below, the plural version is fine, but so is the singular version I have added,
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Right: while "the hot air balloon" is singular and stands as representative of all of them "a hot air balloon," which was in the original post, doesn't.
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