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New2grammar Posted 18 years ago
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0While walking aimlessly on the street in Chayenne, an image of her long-lost boyfriend flashed by in front of Amy.02br
00She lifted her head and looked around. Just when she thought her imagination was playing tricks on her, she saw an exact replica of the back of the guy she'd been searching for 3 years when he left with an apology note on the beside table which she still hadn't understood the content. She rushed into the clothing store which the man entered a split second ago. Her hand reached for the man who was checking02br
00out a brown leather jacket and at the contact, the man turned and to her disappointment, it was another false positive. She continued wondering out the store onto the street.02br
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00Please correct any mistakes.02br
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0 Hello New2G,02br
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00Try looking at this sentence first:02br
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00"Just when she thought her imagination was playing tricks on her, she saw an exact replica of the back of the guy she'd been searching for 3 years when he left with an apology note on the beside table which she still hadn't understood the content."02br
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00Why n
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0While walking aimlessly on the street in Chayenne, an image of her long-lost boyfriend flashed by in front of Amy.02br
00She lifted her head and looked around. Just when she thought her imagination was playing tricks on her, she saw an exact replica of the back of the guy she'd been searching for 3 years. He'd left her with nothing but an apology note on the beside table which she s
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0 Hello N2G,02br
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00It needs a little attention in some other places:02br
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001. an image of her long-lost boyfriend 01u00flashed by in front02u00 of Amy02br
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00— you might prefer a more idiomatic expression: try googling on 01b00+"flashed in front of *'s"02b02br
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01cite10New2grammar12cite10While walking aimlessly on the street in Chayenne, an image of her long-lost boyfriend flashed by in front of Amy.12br
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10This sounds as if the image was walking aimlessly on the street. How about something like, "As Amy walked aimlessly on the street in Cheyenne, an image of h
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0Thanks, Mr. P. I didn't know you'd replied to my post until now. Actually, I've been waiting. Somehow your post escaped me.02br
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001. Thanks for the suggestion!02br
00an image of her long-lost boyfriend flashed in front of her eyes.02br
00I didn't know this was a common expression. Logically, in front of someone should be sufficient. 05002br
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0Thanks, Khoff for the suggestions. Recently I've learn about dangling phrase and I think that's the problem with my sentence here which you've corrected. 02br
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00Oh yeah. Cheyenne! The same spelling as a type of herb used in cooking I believe.02br
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00Thanks!0-
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0Hello New2,02br
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001. "flashed in front of her eyes" <thumbs up>02br
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002. Unfortunately you still need the second "for": you search 01i00for 02i00someone, 01i00for02i00 a period of time. The object of the first "for" is the deleted "that", i.e."a guy [that] she'd been searching for (for three ye
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0Thank you, Mr.P.02br
00Thanks for the clue in #3 but just to be sure I understand it and other cases like this, I'll create a new thread to discuss.0-
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