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MUSCOVITE Posted 13 years ago
Grammar

correcting ungrammatical sentence

Hi,

If you want other users to be able to view the map on their own (independently from each other) and save the map to local PC, select the alternative option, "Save your map".

I guess this sentence is in a "very bad repair" :-)

(1) The noun "map" is used twice. How to replace the second instance of "map" with the personal pronoun 'it" best?
(2) "to local PC" --- why not "to a local PC" or "their PCs" or just "to the local PC" or "to the local PCs"??
Which is best?

If you could "polish up" this sloppy sentence for me?

Thank you!

mus-te
  

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MUSCOVITE I guess this sentence is in a "very bad repair" :-)(1) The noun "map" is used twice That is not in itself a breach of style. It may indeed improve the understandability of the instruction. Which is best?

— Mister Micawber

  • MUSCOVITE I guess this sentence is in a "very bad repair" :-)(1) The noun "map" is used twice That is not in itself a breach of style.
  • It may indeed improve the understandability of the instruction.
  • Which is best?
  • "to local PC" is fine alone: it is standard 'instruction-speak'.
  • However, I agree that it is out of register with the other nouns in the sentence.
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MUSCOVITEI guess this sentence is in a "very bad repair" :-)(1) The noun "map" is used twice
That is not in itself a breach of style. It may indeed improve the understandability of the instruction.
MUSCOVITE(2) "to local PC" --- why not "to a local PC" or "their PCs" or just "to the local PC" or "to the local PCs"??Which is best?
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