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Nonodiv Posted 11 years ago
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Correcting my essay.
Hi guys, please help me to find the mistakes I made.
This story is about two orphan girls.
It must be descriptive.
It must contain 10 similies and 10 metaphors.
If possible, give me some metaphors for the last paragraph??
Olivia and odette were a team of two. They saw together with four eyes, and used eight limbs like a spider. They shared language and secrets that they only understood. Olivia's dad had a heart attack on his way home, that his car swerved and flipped into the opposite lane like a beetle on its back which caused his death. Her mom died after three months of her birth. Odette knew nothing about her family. The only thing she knew was that she was brought to the orphanage by Mrs. Lee. As they grew up together their friendship was growing too. Because the were not limited by the orphanage rules, they faced many troubles.
Olivia was a blonde girl with soft features. Her hair was wavy like sea waves and golden like the sun shine. Her face was round like an orange. Her nose was small like an olive. On the other hand, odette was a burette girl with tough features. Her face was oval like an egg. Her nose was big like a beak. Despite all these differences between them, nothing scratched the friendship.
The world around them wasn't big, but their friendship was. After the whole world had gone out for them their friendship came to be the best ship. Life was cruel for them, but their friendship was the confidence. The antidote for all tough circumstances they faced was their friendship.
This story is about two orphan girls.
It must be descriptive.
It must contain 10 similies and 10 metaphors.
If possible, give me some metaphors for the last paragraph??
Olivia and odette were a team of two. They saw together with four eyes, and used eight limbs like a spider. They shared language and secrets that they only understood. Olivia's dad had a heart attack on his way home, that his car swerved and flipped into the opposite lane like a beetle on its back which caused his death. Her mom died after three months of her birth. Odette knew nothing about her family. The only thing she knew was that she was brought to the orphanage by Mrs. Lee. As they grew up together their friendship was growing too. Because the were not limited by the orphanage rules, they faced many troubles.
Olivia was a blonde girl with soft features. Her hair was wavy like sea waves and golden like the sun shine. Her face was round like an orange. Her nose was small like an olive. On the other hand, odette was a burette girl with tough features. Her face was oval like an egg. Her nose was big like a beak. Despite all these differences between them, nothing scratched the friendship.
The world around them wasn't big, but their friendship was. After the whole world had gone out for them their friendship came to be the best ship. Life was cruel for them, but their friendship was the confidence. The antidote for all tough circumstances they faced was their friendship.
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I have underlined some problem areas: Olivia and odette were a team of two. They saw together with four ey es, a nd used eight limbs like a spider. They shared language and secrets that they only understood.
- I have underlined some problem areas: Olivia and odette were a team of two.
- They saw together with four ey es, a nd used eight limbs like a spider.
- They shared language and secrets that they only understood.
- Olivia's dad had a heart attack on his way home, that his car swerved and flipped into the opposite lane like a beetle on its ba ck w hich caused his death.
- Her mom died after three months of her birth.
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I have underlined some problem areas:
Olivia and odette were a team of two. They saw together with four eyes, and used eight limbs like a spider. They shared language and secrets that they only understood. Olivia's dad had a heart attack on his way home, that his car swerved and flipped into the opposite lane like a beetle on its back which caused his
Olivia and odette were a team of two. They saw together with four eyes, and used eight limbs like a spider. They shared language and secrets that they only understood. Olivia's dad had a heart attack on his way home, that his car swerved and flipped into the opposite lane like a beetle on its back which caused his
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