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Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
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Correcting a short abstract
Hi everyone.
The last couple of weeks i have been working on a written assignemt (20 pages) about the Danish designer label, SELECTED. I have reached the end of my work and i am supposed to sum it all up in a short abstract.
The report itself is written i Danish - but the abstract is written on english. I where therefore wondering if anyone of you would be very kind and correct my abstract.
We had a lot of silly guidelines we had to follow - and therefor the language isn't as fluent as i could hope for.
Anyway - here it goes:
"This paper examines the situation SELECTED in right now – and how they can get more successful in the coming years. SELECTED is a part of the Danish group, Bestseller. SELECTED had a turnover of 900.000.000 Danish crowns in 2006/07. There have been used a wide range of different theories and models to find the present strategic situation of SELECTED. Both the internal and the external conditions have been analysed. The paper also discusses how SELECTED is supposed to develop their business in the future. This topic is approached by variety of models - among these can the generic strategies of Porter be mentioned. This study shows that SELECTED has a very good position on the market. The possibilities for growth are almost infinite. One of the only weak points for SELECTED is the lacking marketing. They have to put themselves in focus through marketing. The paper concludes that there are a majority of positive sites when it comes to the business of SELECTED."
I need the corrections as soon as posible, because i have to be finish tonight.
- Jesper
The last couple of weeks i have been working on a written assignemt (20 pages) about the Danish designer label, SELECTED. I have reached the end of my work and i am supposed to sum it all up in a short abstract.
The report itself is written i Danish - but the abstract is written on english. I where therefore wondering if anyone of you would be very kind and correct my abstract.
We had a lot of silly guidelines we had to follow - and therefor the language isn't as fluent as i could hope for.
Anyway - here it goes:
"This paper examines the situation SELECTED in right now – and how they can get more successful in the coming years. SELECTED is a part of the Danish group, Bestseller. SELECTED had a turnover of 900.000.000 Danish crowns in 2006/07. There have been used a wide range of different theories and models to find the present strategic situation of SELECTED. Both the internal and the external conditions have been analysed. The paper also discusses how SELECTED is supposed to develop their business in the future. This topic is approached by variety of models - among these can the generic strategies of Porter be mentioned. This study shows that SELECTED has a very good position on the market. The possibilities for growth are almost infinite. One of the only weak points for SELECTED is the lacking marketing. They have to put themselves in focus through marketing. The paper concludes that there are a majority of positive sites when it comes to the business of SELECTED."
I need the corrections as soon as posible, because i have to be finish tonight.
- Jesper
Top answer
The name, 'SELECTED', is very distracting to the reader when it is in all-capital letters. If it can be written as ' Selected ', that would be much better. This paper examines the situation in which SELECTED currently finds itself, and how it can become more successful in the coming years.
- The name, 'SELECTED', is very distracting to the reader when it is in all-capital letters.
- If it can be written as ' Selected ', that would be much better.
- This paper examines the situation in which SELECTED currently finds itself, and how it can become more successful in the coming years.
- 000 Danish crowns in 2006/07.
- A large number of theories and models have been used to determine SELECTED's present strategic situation.
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The name, 'SELECTED', is very distracting to the reader when it is in all-capital letters. If it can be written as 'Selected', that would be much better.
This paper examines the situation in which SELECTED currently finds itself, and how it can become more successful in the coming years. SELECTED is a part of the Danish group, Bestseller, an
This paper examines the situation in which SELECTED currently finds itself, and how it can become more successful in the coming years. SELECTED is a part of the Danish group, Bestseller, an
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