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Believer Posted 19 years ago
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Correct this please

0A short e-mail:02br
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00Hi all you members,02br
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00The hot season is finally in the ending stage and I am looking forward to a little cooler weather. We haven't had a chance to meet and discuss what we want to do for the upcoming season and I feel that having a meeting at my place will be good. I am thinking of a meeting that will last two days and one night. Accommodation will be provided to you all who wants to come but I feel obligated to charge 01i00____02i00 for each person willing to attend to cover the expenses running this event/meeting. If you are receptive to my suggestion, please send me a check for the amount by 23rd of May. If I receive your check by that date, I will put your name on the list of members who will attend and proceed with sending those of you who will attend with further details.02br
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00All the best to you all,02br
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00Believer0-
  

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1i 00Good structure; too wordy toward the end. 02br 00We haven't had a chance to meet and discuss what we want to do for the upcoming season01b 00,02b 00 and I feel that having a meeting at my place will be good. I am thinking of a meeting that will last two days and one night.

  • 1i 00Good structure; too wordy toward the end.
  • 02br 00We haven't had a chance to meet and discuss what we want to do for the upcoming season01b 00,02b 00 and I feel that having a meeting at my place will be good.
  • I am thinking of a meeting that will last two days and one night.
  • Accommodation will be provided to 01b 00all of you02b 00 who 01b 00want 02b 00to come01b 00, 02b 00but I feel 01b 00obliged02b 00 to charge 01i 00____02i 00 for each 01b 00person to02b 00 cover the expenses01b 00 of hold02b 00ing this event/meeting.
  • If you are receptive to01b 00 this idea02b 00, please send me a check for the amount, 01b 00to arrive02b 00 by 01b 00the02b 00 23rd of May.
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1i00Good structure; too wordy toward the end. Try this:02br
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00The hot season is finally 01b00coming to an end02b00 and I am looking forward to a little cooler weather.02br
00We haven't had a chance to meet and discuss what we want to do for the upcoming season01b00,02b00 and I fee

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