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0Please correct the following if there is anything to be corrected. I found these sentences from a brochure of a city in Korea. The details are not copied in correct or chronological order.02br02br01i00Re: Gak wonsa02i02br02br01i00Gakwonsa (temple) is located on the middle of Mt. Taejosan ... Budda's statue above mentioned is 48 feet (14.5m) tall and 100 feet (20m) round. The length of an ear of that is about 5.8 feet (1.75m), one of the nails of that is 1 feet (30cm). The weight of the statue is over 60 tons.  The great blonze statue, at the back of the main peak of Mt. Taejosan, look at the west side with merciful smile.  02i02br02br01i00Re: Remains of Yu Gwansun02i02br02br01i00A memorial was built to commemorate her patriotic spirit in Aunae in 1072 ... Nearby, there is a beacon mound site, beacon tower, grave and home. A memorial hall opened in April, 2003.02i0-

Nona the brit · Accepted Answer

1i00Gakwonsa (temple) is located halfway up Mt. Taejosan. 02i02br
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01i00Budda's statue is 48 feet (14.5m) tall and 100 feet (20m) round. The length of an ear is about 5.8 feet (1.75m) and one of the nails is 1 foot (30cm). The statue weighs over 60 tons. The great bronze statue, behind the main peak of Mt. Taejosan, looks at the west side with a merciful smile. 02i02br
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01i00Remains of Yu Gwansun02i02br
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01i00A memorial was built in Aunae in 1072 to commemorate her patriotic spirit. Nearby, there is a beacon mound site, beacon tower, grave and home (home sounds wrong here. whose home? Perhaps they just mean a house). The memorial hall opened in April, 2003.02i0-

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0Thank you. I see little difference between saying "The statue weighs over 60 tons." and "The weight of the statue is over 60 tons," except yours flows better.02br
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00And I do agree that 'the behind' sounds better that 'the back' but how would you say when you want to say, although I don't know if this is what needs to be said for the statue, the Budda's statue is located at the 01u00backside 02u00of the main peak of Mt. Taejosan. What if the statue is situated on the main peak of the mountain, not behind it, but the fact is that it is on the backside of the main peak. Would it be right to say like this?02br
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01i00The great bronze statue, in the 01u00backside02u00 the main peak of Mt. Taejosan, looks at the west side with a merciful smile.02i02br
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00Hope the question makes sense to you.0-

Feebs11 · Answer

0 located at the 01u00backside 02u00of the main peak of Mt. Taejosan. 01font00located to the rear of Mt. Taejosan's main peak02font0-

Nona the brit · Answer

0Yes, I wasn't too clear where you meant the statue was. Feebs's suggestion is good.02br
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00I can see why you want to use 'backside' but this word doesn't exist, at least not for this meaning. Nor do 'frontside' or 'sideside'.02br
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00(The only meaning of backside is as a noun for buttocks/***! And I don't think you want to use that. Especially not 'in' the backside 05000).02br
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00I changed the 'weighs X tons' part just for stylistic reasons. The descriptions were a bit long-winded/too formal and started getting very repetitious. 010id1

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