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On November 18th, Minister of Health XXXX invited WAD partners to discuss the matters concerning planned WAD activities. Head of – XXX, Head of Public Health Canter – XXXX, Program Assistant –XXXX, Coordinator of TG branch- XXXX met the Minister of Health, XXXXX. All planned activities were presented in brief. The Minister promised support and therefore organized participation of chamber orchestra in WAD activity free of charge. In addition, he arranged the matters with local TV as well.
The Minister of Health XXXX, made a short speech about the event and existing STI/HIV prevention and treatment opportunities .. The event was accompanied by chamber orchestra making it more attractive. The young painters from thr Art Institute were invited to participate in drawings competition. The winners were awarded by money prize set by JSC XXXX”.
The film “Everything about my mother” was presented free of charge on the second part of the event. TG branch distributed IEC the materials and condoms. Journalists from TV, radio and newspapers, TV attended the event and made a remarkable broadcasting.
The informational banners were placed in the city center and outside of the cinema building.
HIV/AIDS preventative TV spot incorporating ABC messages were broadcasting by TV during a month and in the most frequently visited local café during the day.
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On November 18th, Minister of Health XXXX invited WAD partners to discuss the matters concerning planned WAD activities. Head of – XXX, Head of Public Health Canter – XXXX, Program Assistant –XXXX, Coordinator of TG branch- XXXX met the Minister of Health, XXXXX. All planned activities were presented in brief. The Minister promised support and therefore organized participation of chamber orchestra in WAD activity free of charge. In addition, he arranged the matters with local TV as well.
The Minister of Health XXXX, made a short speech about the event and existing STI/HIV prevention and treatment opportunities .. The event was accompanied by chamber orchestra making it more attractive. The young painters from thr Art Institute were invited to participate in drawings competition. The winners were awarded by money prize set by JSC XXXX”.
The film “Everything about my mother” was presented free of charge on the second part of the event. TG branch distributed IEC the materials and condoms. Journalists from TV, radio and newspapers, TV attended the event and made a remarkable broadcasting.
The informational banners were placed in the city center and outside of the cinema building.
HIV/AIDS preventative TV spot incorporating ABC messages were broadcasting by TV during a month and in the most frequently visited local café during the day.
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I've bolded some of the glaring errors. Grammar aside, I find the writing dry. It will help if you insert a few quotes here and there throughout the article.
- I've bolded some of the glaring errors.
- Grammar aside, I find the writing dry.
- It will help if you insert a few quotes here and there throughout the article.
- On November 18 th, Minister of Health XXXX invited WAD partners to discuss the matters concerning planned WAD activities.
- Head of Public Health Center – ***, Head of Public Health Canter – XXXX, Program Assistant –XXXX, Coordinator of TG branch- XXXX met the Minister of Health, XXXXX.
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I've bolded some of the glaring errors. Grammar aside, I find the writing dry. It will help if you insert a few quotes here and there throughout the article.
On November 18th, Minister of Health XXXX invited WAD partners to discuss the matters concerning planned WAD activities. Head of Public Health Center – ***, Head of Public Health Canter – XXXX, Program Assistant –XXXX
On November 18th, Minister of Health XXXX invited WAD partners to discuss the matters concerning planned WAD activities. Head of Public Health Center – ***, Head of Public Health Canter – XXXX, Program Assistant –XXXX
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