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Tania77maria Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Correct this paragraph

I would apprecriate your help in this paragraph.



This manual describes the crate collapsing stacking machine. The process, by which the crates are mounted and dismantled and lately stacked, is carried out automatically. This automatic process functions by means of cylinders and connecting rods. The crates are collapsed for its stacking. The number of stacking crates will be determined in the machine sales contract. The crates are left on a belt conveyor for its automatic extraction.



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Here is how I would correct this paragraph. (Bold-faced words are my additions or replacements, crossed-out words or punctuation are my deletions. ) This manual describes the crate collapsing and stacking machine.

— Doctor D

  • Here is how I would correct this paragraph.
  • (Bold-faced words are my additions or replacements, crossed-out words or punctuation are my deletions.
  • ) This manual describes the crate collapsing and stacking machine.
  • The process , by which the crates are mounted , and dismantled , and lately later stacked , is carried out automatically.
  • This automatic process functions by means of cylinders and connecting rods.
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Here is how I would correct this paragraph. (Bold-faced words are my additions or replacements, crossed-out words or punctuation are my deletions.)

This manual describes the crate collapsing and stacking machine. The process, by which the crates are mounted, and dismantled, and lately later stacked, is ca
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Doctor DHow does the contract determine how many stacked crates there are?
First of all, thank you very much for you kind help. I really appreciate it.

All these machines work the same but they are programmed according to client's requirements.

Thank you again.
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So, the number of stacked crates is a variable which is determined by the sales contract. I would put that sentence in parenthesis (to indicate that it is an added remark).
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