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A woman, or a slave??

"Iam not a slave, just do it your self, and never asked me to!"
One woman, we often call her as "modern woman", yelled to her husband

Well, to be the real woman is not easy. Can you imagine, a woman is a creature who always feel not enough.
They always feel that they are not sexy enough, not pretty enough, etc.
They will do everything to make them more and more goodlooking, especially to be seen by a man.

Nowadays, many things make woman become more complicated.
Not only their high need about sexy body, pretty face, clothes, shoes, atec, but also their high need of carier, ambition, and obsession, makes them more selfish.
They don't really think about how to be a good wife for her husband or a good mom for their children.
What they think is how to be a good them, that's all.

What we need to be emphasized here is, if all women become like that, than what the world will be?
We need women. Women who take care of their children and their husband. And to they are not slave if they do so. They will be a slave if they just take care of their appearance, ambition, carrier, etc. They are the real slave if they do so, because neither ambition, carrier, nor pretty face can give them the real happiness.

Being a woman is not easy.
one day, there is a men who asked to a wise man " Who is the person that I have to respect ?"
Then the wise man said " the first, is your mom, the is your mom, than the fourth is your dad."

So, Does it make a sense?
Be proud to be a woman, a wife, and a mom