Correct the grammar of the paragraphs.

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Please help me correct the grammar of these paragraphs. Thanks so much.

Right away, it's nearly 11:00 pm. I've just got through replying to a friend , it's quite long, so I have to take a long time. She's Taiwanese, quite nice and very kind. She's very curious about Vietnamese culture, activity, attitude with foreigner.... She also wants to travel to Vietnam and have specialities. While I was writing, Tuan buzzed me, gave me a website and asked me for giving him some advice about choosing which model of shoes he should buy. To see and give him my advice, done !

Kept on writing. A short while later, Huynh Anh said hi to me. I told her to wait for me a moment. Then, I continued my business. When I finished, She has been off-line for a long while, hix.... sorry for this.

I tried to find someone to chat. Today, my friend went back to his hometown. Hope of getting some speciality from his hometown after his return, hehe.

Hmmm, let me remember whether there is any talk which happened today to relate to you. Ah, Sea Games 24. This afternoon, after finishing the class, my friends and me went to a coffee shop to watch the football match between Vietnam and Malaysia. This match, Vietnamese team played was not good although trouncing Malaysian team. Be quite disappointed. How about you ?

Hix, I'm getting sleepy. Tomorrow is Sunday, hope for a nice weekend for everybody.

Good night.

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Please help me correct the grammar of these paragraphs. Thanks so much.

Right away,-said my mother (for example)- it's nearly 11:00 pm. I've just gotten through replying to a friend (it's very complicated, it'd better to change it), it was quite long, so I have to take a long time. She's Taiwanese, quite nice and very kind. She's very curious about Vietnamese culture, activity, attitude with foreigner.... Also She wants to travel to Vietnam and have a specialities. While I had been writing, Tuan buzzed me, pointed to a website and asked me for giving some advice about choosing model of shoes he should buy. I've done it!

~~Kept on writing~~. (It would better to make sentence, but not a fragment.) For a bit lately Huynh Anh greeted me. I asked her to wait for a moment. Then, I had continued my business. When I had finished, She was being out of network for a long time, hix?.... sorry for this.

I was looking for someone to chat. Today, my friend go back to his hometown. The hope of getting some speciality from his hometown after his return, hehe.

~~Hmmm, let me remember whether there is any talk which happened today to relate to you~~ - terrible construction (is it question or something elst?). Ah, Sea Games 24. Whe we were Finishing the class in the afternoon, I and my friends went to a coffee shop for watching the football match between Vietnam and Malaysia. This match, Vietnamese team played was not good although trouncing Malaysian team. (it's acceptable - Although Vietnamese team played bad they could beat their opponents.) ~~Be quite disappointed~~ (We were very flabbergasted and dissapointed at the same time) . What about you ?

Hix, I'm ~~getting~~ going to have a good sleep.. Tomorrow is Sunday, hope for a nice weekend for everybody.

Good night.

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Right NOW, it's nearly 11:00 pm. I've just gotten through replying to a friend. The messge is quite long, so I have to take a long time. She's Taiwanese, quite nice and very kind. She's very curious about Vietnamese culture, activity, and attitudes about foreigners. She also wants to travel to Vietnam and see some special place of interest. While I was writing, Tuan buzzed me, gave me a website and asked me to give him some advice about choosing which brandl of shoes he should buy. I gave him my advice, so that is done!

I continued writing. A short while later, Huynh Anh said hi to me. I told her to wait for me a moment. Then, I continued my business. When I finished, I discovered that she had been off-line for a long while. I am sorry for missing her.

I tried to find someone to chat with. Today, my friend went back to his hometown. I hope to get something special from his hometown after his return. He he.

Hmmm, let me remember whether there is any gossip that happened today that I can tell you about. Ah yes, Sea Games 24. This afternoon after finishing the class, my friends and I went to a coffee shop to watch the football match between Vietnam and Malaysia. At this match, the Vietnamese team played well, but not that good - although they did trounce the Malaysian team. I am very disappointed. How about you ?

Hix, I'm getting sleepy. Tomorrow is Sunday. I hope everybody has a nice weekend.

Good night.

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00I tried to find someone to chat with, but no one was online. Today, my friend went back to his hometown. He was hoping to get some speciality from his hometown after his return. hehe. 02br
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00Hmmm, let me remember whether there was any conversations which happened today to relate to you. Ah, Sea Games 24. This afternoon, after finishing the class, my friends and I went to a coffee shop to watch the football match between Vietnam and Malaysia. This match, the Vietnamese team played not very well although beating the Malaysian team. I was quite disappointed; were you ?02br
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00Well, I'm getting sleepy. Tomorrow is Sunday, and i wish everybody a beautiful weekend.02br
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Product Development

Assignment

Student Name: Rubaljeet Singh

Student Id: 301003006

Professor Name:

MKTG

Principle of Marketing

Product:

Sony Xperia XA3: The Sony Xperia XA3 is an Android based smartphone which will be produced by Sony Incorporation.

Description of the product:

This smartphone will have variety of features. Focus would be given on the camera quality with 20-megapixel rear camera along with sensor size of ½ inch, 10,000 mAh non-removable battery. Except all of these, this device would be 5.5-inch 720p screen with 64-bit 2.0 GHz octa core Mediatek system and 6 Gb Ram with 256 internal memory. It will also have microSD card expansion up to 250 GB and will also have feature of hybrid autofocus. This hybrid autofocus would focus any kind of object within 0.02 seconds. This device will be available in different kinds of colours. Guarantee will also be given for 2 years. This device will also add with the feature of health fitness.

Categories of new product development:

Idea Generation:

As a marketer, I observed that people are now addicted to use the technology more as opposed to the previous years. So, I have various options of which product should be produced such as smartwatches, tablets, smartphones in a market to make it more reliable for people and profitable for the company as well.

Idea screening:

In this stage, I must choose one product from various alternatives, such as tablet, smartphone, smartwatches and laptops, that will be beneficial for the organization and satisfy customer needs. So, smartphone is a best alternative that I chose to produce in this stage because people get easily attracted towards a smartphone which has best camera quality.

Business Analysis:

The biggest company just like Apple and Samsung are well known for its smartphone’s camera quality which is the main reason of their business growth. Despite this, sales of their smartphones are also going very well just because of their high-resolution pixel. These are competing companies in the market. So, we will conduct research in the market and the sales performance of existing products in our nearby range. Instead of this, what would be the price of a product is also included in business analysis. So, we will be going to set the price for a product after reviewing our market on what price would be other companies set for their products. We can also compare our past sale records of product to set product price. In addition, we will estimate our product sale’s volume that we will anticipate based on our research into customers requirements. As a marketer, I will estimate the profitability of my company product and decide break even point. I will also find if there are any grants and business help available to make new product.

Test Marketing:

In this phase, as a marketer, I will apply observation methods to know about the customer preference for a product. For instance, sample products will be displayed in several malls and multiplex. Then customer will come and use it with their own hands to know about the features of that product and give his/her feedback. In the meantime, I will perform the testing session of a product by selling it free with Sony’s LED tv which will let us know about the feedback of a customer regarding a product. Some products would be given to the company’s employees for the beta testing to know about the successful running operations of that smartphone. I will also take an opportunity of marketing mix to make it more successful for customer as well as for the company too.

Commercialization:

The final step in the process of new product development is commercialization. After performing all the steps, I will communicate with the company about the releasing date of smartphone and conducting advertisement and promotion online as well as in the magazines, newspaper and on tv channels to promote it worldwide. Social media would be very helpful to make it popular fast as compared to publishing in newspaper. So, I will prefer advertising on social sites more as compared to other platforms to make this smartphone more approachable.

Target Market:

Demographic:

Age: Focus would be given between the age group of 16 to 35 years who will be going to buy it and use it more as compared to the old ones. Specially in Canada, college students and teens would be more attracted towards this smartphone.

Income level: It will also matter as income power decides the purchasing capacity of a customer. For this, the income level would have to be $60,000 annual income.

Occupation: Every person would be able to get this smartphone whether he/she would be related to agricultural department or working in any organization.

Education level: A general education will be necessary to operate smartphone properly.

Geographic:

Region of a country:

Market Size: Being a marketer, I will must focus on the potential buyers who will be able to buy smartphone. Also, I will take the proportion of population into consideration to decide the estimated sales of the smartphone through forecasting. I will do market research on my competitors to know about their marketing mix strategies.

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