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0 When we embrace Nichiren Daishonin's Buddhism, and propagate the  religion so that others can also achieve happiness, we will feel as  though we were wearing a robe full of fragrance.02br02br00Is the sentence fine? Can it be improved upon?02br02br00Thanks in advance.0-

Old Man Gordon · Accepted Answer

0I think 'we' have to wear 'robes' not 'a robe'02br
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00The comma after Buddhism may be incorrect since embrace and propogate are verbs of the same subject. Or you could add 'we' after the 'and'.0-

Yoong Liat · Answer

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01cite10Old Man Gordon12cite10I think 'we' have to wear 'robes' not 'a robe'12br
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10The comma after Buddhism may be incorrect since embrace and propogate are verbs of the same subject. Or you could add 'we' after the 'and'.12br
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10 When we embrace Nichiren Daishonin's Buddhism, and propagate the religion so that others can also achieve happiness, we will feel as though we 01b00were02b00 wearing a robe full of fragrance.02br
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00I would like to know whether 01b00'will' 02b00and '01b00were'02b00 are correctly used here. Is it not hypothetical? 0-

Yankee · Answer

0 Hi Yoong Liat02br
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00I have no problem with the singular 'robe', but I would also omit the comma after Buddhism.02br
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00'Will' and 'would' are fine, in my opinion. I basically see the word 'will' as being used to make a straightforward prediction in the sense that "a special feeling will be achieved". The word 'would' is then used to describe the special feeling in a theoretical or "unreal" way.0-

Yoong Liat · Answer

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01cite10Yankee12cite10Hi Yoong Liat12br
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10I have no problem with the singular 'robe', but I would also omit the comma after Buddhism.12br
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10'Will' and 'would' are fine, in my opinion. I basically see the word 'will' as being used to make a straightforward prediction in the sense that "a special feeling will be achieved". The word 'would' is then used to describe the special feeling in a theoretical or "unreal" way.12br
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10Hi Amy, 02br
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00I agree about the comma being removed. 02br
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00Just to confirm: The believers feel as if they 01b00were02b00 wearing a robe full of fragrance. It is in the figurative sense.They are not actually wearing such a robe. This being the case, should 'were' instead of 'are' be used? Thanks in advance.0-

Yankee · Answer

0 No, now you've changed several things and in this case I'd also change 'robe' to 'robes'. 02br
00I guess the reason I didn't mind the singular 'robe' in your first sentence was that 'we' can be used in the sense of "each one of us" -- which is how I interpreted your first sentence. If you want to use 'the believers' instead, then use 'robes'.02br
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00"01i00The believers feel as if they 01b00were02b00 wearing a robe full of fragrance.02i00" --> Now you've written about a real situation instead of making a prediction. Predictions are by definition never 100% certain, but a real situation is. And in this real situation, you state how the believers describe the way they feel. In this case, I'd just use the simple present tense:02br
01font01i00The believers 01b00feel02b00 as if they 01b00are02b00 wearing 01b00robes02b00 full of fragrance.02br
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02i00You can put the same sentence into the past tense:02br
02font01font01i00The believers felt as if they 01b00were02b00 wearing 01b00robes02b00 full of fragrance.02br
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00PS02br
00In my other post, I mistakenly wrote "will and would" -- I meant to write "will and were". Sorry about that.02font0-

Yoong Liat · Answer

0 Thanks, Amy, for the reply.02br
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00Best wishes.02br
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