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Perfect Stranger Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Correct or not? no. 71: a few sentences about history

Dear All,

Would you please be so kind and tell me if the following sentences are well-worded? If there's anything awkward or requiring correction, please let me know. I probably missed a lot of punctuation in these sentences. It would be wonderful if you could help me with all of them but if you have little time, then the highlighted ones will do.

If there's a better way to structure these sentences, I'd be much obliged for your guidance.

1) In 1625 King Charles I took the throne and opposition to the Puritans began to increase. Although many
Puritans who remained in the country under James I wanted to reform the church from within, they now felt their
chances of doing so were diminished.

2) In 1629 Charles I dismissed the Parliament and allowed the anti-Puritan Archbishop of Canterbury to tighten
royal control over the church. The ministers with Puritan tendencies were removed and church elders who
harbored such ministers were threatened.

3) As the situation was becoming more and more tense, under these new changes, the Puritans who represented
the moderate group, the so-called non-separatists, felt that under such circumstances and the increasing pressure
from the crown no longer could they remain in England and decided to leave for the New World.

Thanks
  

Top answer

The ministers with Puritan tendencies were removed and church elders who harbored such ministers were threatened. ) 3) As the situation was becoming more and more tense, (? no comma) under these new (?

  • The ministers with Puritan tendencies were removed and church elders who harbored such ministers were threatened.
  • ) 3) As the situation was becoming more and more tense, (?
  • no comma) under these new (?
  • ) circumstances and the increasing pressure from the crown , (comma) they could no longer could they remain in England .
  • So they decided to leave for the New World.
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The ministers with Puritan tendencies were removed and church elders who harbored such ministers were threatened.
(You need an antecedent to define which ministers you are referring to.)

3) As the situation was becoming more and more tense, (? no comma) under these new (? changes are usually ne) changes, the Puritans who represented the moderate group, the
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1) In 1625, Charles I ascended the throne and opposition to the Puritans intensified. Although many
Puritans who had remained in the country under James I wished to reform the Church from within, they now felt their chances of doing so diminished.

2) In 1629, Charles I dismissed Parliament and allowed the anti-Puritan Archbishop of Canterbury to tighten
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Thank you AS. I never know when a sentence becomes a run-on sentence to be honest... and how to avoid them.
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Mister M has made some better suggestions. I tend to be conservative and leave as much as possible of the original post, but the result is usually suboptimal.

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