Correct my writing task 1, please!

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The bar chart compared the number of students in thousand by gender on eight different subjects in 2005. The subject listed are sciences, mathematics, social sciences, languages, humanities and the Arts (art, music, drama), literature and law.

In general, sciences and mathematics were more popular to men than woman. Female interested in non-sciences subject such as social sciences, the arts, literature and humanities and law. Social Sciences and languages had more female students than male students.

A majority of men and women students chose sciences and social sciences, twenty one thousand male students chose sciences, twenty four thousand female students chose social sciences. By contrast, law and literature were chosen by ten thousand and fifteen thousand male students respectively while five thousand and ten thousand female students chose the same major. On the other hand, only two thousand men's studied languages and extremely few men's chose the Arts. Humanities had many male students as female students.

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The bar chart compares the number of men and women university students studying each of eight major subjects ~~in thousands by gender on~~ ~~eight different subjects~~ in 2005. The subjects shown ~~listed~~ are sciences, mathematics, social sciences, languages, humanities and the arts (art, music, drama), literature and law.

In general, sciences and mathematics were more popular among to men than woman. (Only one female?) ~~Female~~ who preferred the ~~interested in~~ non-sciences subjects such as social sciences, the arts, literature, ~~and~~ humanities and law. Social Sciences and languages had more female ~~students~~ than male students.

A majority (A majority means more than 50%. Your observation is wrong. The total number of male students is the same as females, 95 thousand each. Twenty-one thousand is not more than 50% of 95 thousand.) of men and women students chose sciences and social sciences, twenty-one thousand male students chose sciences, and twenty-four thousand female students chose social sciences. By contrast, law and literature were chosen by ten thousand and fifteen thousand male students respectively while five thousand and ten thousand female students chose the same major. (Which one, law or literature?) On the other hand, only two thousand men's (The possessive form is incorrect. e.g. The men's dormitory was fully booked. ) studied languages and extremely few men's chose the Arts. Humanities had many male students as female students.

Some suggestions:

If you add up all the numbers, you will find there are equal numbers of men and women, 95 thousand. That is an interesting observation.

With these totals you can talk about the proportion of each group who selected one of the subjects. For example, only 3% of the men chose to study languages, compared with 42% who picked Math or Science.

The ratio of women to men in languages was 9 to 1; for every 10 students enrolled in languages, 9 would be women and one would be a man.

Science ranked as the first choice for men, followed by math, literature, social sciences and law.
Among the women, social sciences ranked first, followed by languages. Nearly half of all the women (44%) were in one of these two majors.

The least popular subject was the arts with a total enrollment of 12 thousand students, the majority of whom were women, (10 thousand.)

The subject with the highest overall enrollment was social sciences, with 38 thousand. Humanities was unique in having equal numbers of men and women.

Correct my writing task 1, please!

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