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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
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Correct my sentences please

I'm x years old and I have been in this investment business for more than 12 days and have made profits of more than XX$ so far. Just some months ago I came across a concept called *** which has been using scam people and to put an end to this concept and bring an revolution in it, I have started myself this program where you can earn some guranteed fixed profits and I'm sure it is going to beat all other HYIPs one day.
  

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] 1) I'm x years old and have been in the investment business for only twelve days, making a profit of more than $xx so far. 2) A few months ago I came across a concept called ***, which has been used to scam people. To put an end to this practice, I have created a program where one can earn some guaranteed fixed profits.

— Philip

  • ] 1) I'm x years old and have been in the investment business for only twelve days, making a profit of more than $xx so far.
  • 2) A few months ago I came across a concept called ***, which has been used to scam people.
  • To put an end to this practice, I have created a program where one can earn some guaranteed fixed profits.
  • I'm sure it is going to surpass all other HYIPs one day.
  • [I'm not familiar enough with your situation to advise you further, but perhaps this will serve as a start.
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[You tend to try to get too much into one sentence, which can lead to confusion on the part of the reader.]

1) I'm x years old and have been in the investment business for only twelve days, making a profit of more than $xx so far.

2) A few months ago I came across a concept called ***, which has been used to scam people. To put an end to this practice, I have created a progr
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