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Rema Alzer Posted 14 years ago
Grammar
correct my sentence
Hey I'm writing an english paper, and I'm trying to make a conceptual topic sentence for my introduction paragraph, and I wanted to know if I was missing a punctuation in my sentence, if so which, and an explanation of why would be fantastic!
The Culture of Fear, by Barry Glassner, is a book that explains how a legion of organizations coerce and take advantage of the fears that America’s culture has adapted to over the years as a stingy way to increase their profits.
The Culture of Fear, by Barry Glassner, is a book that explains how a legion of organizations coerce and take advantage of the fears that America’s culture has adapted to over the years as a stingy way to increase their profits.
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Hi. Welcome to the forums. Your sentence needs no additional punctuation, but I think I should mention two problems I see.
- Hi.
- Welcome to the forums.
- Your sentence needs no additional punctuation, but I think I should mention two problems I see.
- It says that they coerce fears, because "coerce" is transitive, but you can't coerce a fear.
- Also, I think you should make sure "stingy" is the word you want there.
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Hi. Welcome to the forums.
Your sentence needs no additional punctuation, but I think I should mention two problems I see. It says that they coerce fears, because "coerce" is transitive, but you can't coerce a fear. Also, I think you should make sure "stingy" is the word you want there.
Your sentence needs no additional punctuation, but I think I should mention two problems I see. It says that they coerce fears, because "coerce" is transitive, but you can't coerce a fear. Also, I think you should make sure "stingy" is the word you want there.
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hey thanks! How's this?
The Culture of Fear, by Barry Glassner, is a book that explains how a legion of people and organizations take advantage of the fears that America’s culture has adapted to over the years as a dishonorable way to increase their profits.
The Culture of Fear, by Barry Glassner, is a book that explains how a legion of people and organizations take advantage of the fears that America’s culture has adapted to over the years as a dishonorable way to increase their profits.
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Rema Alzera conceptual topic sentenceHere the style is a little different, but I would go with something like this.
By taking advantage of Americans' anxieties, a legion of organizations has found a cost-effective way to increase profits. So explains Barry Glassner in The Culture of Fear.
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