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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Correct my paragraph

There were incorrect and omitted entries found in the issue book that would have resulted in differences in the Warehouse. We show the errors to Jane and Michelle which they rechecked and confirmed, the book was subsequently adjusted with the correct figures. The errors did not affect the salespersons books because it was posted accurately to those records.
  

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I would make the following changes to correct and clarify your paragraph (boldface are my changes, cross-outs are deleted original language): There were incorrect and omitted entries found in the issue book that would have resulted in differences in the Warehouse. We show ed the errors to Jane and Michelle , which they rechecked and confirmed the entries, and the book was subsequently adjusted with the correct figures. The errors did not affect the salespersons ' books because it was the entries were posted accurately to those records.

— Doctor D

  • I would make the following changes to correct and clarify your paragraph (boldface are my changes, cross-outs are deleted original language): There were incorrect and omitted entries found in the issue book that would have resulted in differences in the Warehouse.
  • We show ed the errors to Jane and Michelle , which they rechecked and confirmed the entries, and the book was subsequently adjusted with the correct figures.
  • The errors did not affect the salespersons ' books because it was the entries were posted accurately to those records.
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I would make the following changes to correct and clarify your paragraph (boldface are my changes, cross-outs are deleted original language):

There were incorrect and omitted entries found in the issue book that would have resulted in differences in the Warehouse. We showed the errors to Jane and Michelle, which they rechecked and confirmed the entries,
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