Correct my letter for me please(grammar)!

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I need a help from you. I would be happy if anyone correct this letter for me. Thanks in advance.

Dear...

I am applying for the Summer Internship position at ... in .... When I discovered the position I was immediately drawn to the opportunity to join because I know you are an environment that nurtures knowledge-sharing. My logical thinking and hard worker skills make me a well-qualified applicant for this position.

I am very excited about the chance to work in a team that has complete IT services and where I could develop my knowledge. I am prepared to engage in continuous learning. As described by the internship description, I would enjoy to learn how to design, build and maintain efficient, reusable and reliable code .

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

Just correcting the grammar:

Dear...

I am applying for the Summer Internship position at ... in .... When I discovered the position I was immediately drawn to the opportunity to join because I know you are an environment that nurtures knowledge-sharing. My logical thinking and hard ~~worker~~ working skills make me a well-qualified applicant for this position.

I am very excited about the chance to work in a team that has complete IT services and where I could develop my knowledge. I am prepared to engage in continuous learning. As described by the internship description, I would enjoy learning ~~to learn how~~ to design, build and maintain efficient, reusable and reliable code .

If you want to add more:

"My logical thinking and hard worker skills make me a well-qualified applicant for this position."

instead try

I believe my critical thinking and goal oriented work style would make me a well-qualified applicant for this position. My experience as a (insert a relevant experience that demonstrates the previously mentioned skills) prepares me for this role.

" I am prepared to engage in continuous learning."

try

I am excited to apply what I have learned through (what- college, technical school, self taught?) while continuiing to learn in a hands on environment.

"As described by the internship description, I would enjoy to learn how to design, build and maintain efficient, reusable and reliable code ."

try

As described by the internship description, I would enjoy learning how to design, build and maintain efficient, reusable and reliable code." (Perhaps insert the computer language the company uses to demonstrate the knowledge you already possess)

NOTE: your original letter had some grammatical errrors so I would definetly post your final version or run it through Grammarly.

Correct my letter for me please(grammar)!

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