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Pilita Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Correct my intro please

0 “The Motorcycle Diaries”, directed by Walter Salles, is a film based in a true-life story that had a profound impact on revolutionary Ernesto “Che” Guevara de la Serna and his friend Alberto Granado. During the 1950’s, Ernesto Guevara, a medical student, and Alberto Granado, a biochemist student, decided to take a motorcycle trip across South America—from Argentina to Venezuela. Throughout the trip, Ernesto and Alberto discovered the reality of a land filled with suffering and injustice. Understanding these issues are essential to understanding the challenges that every Latino has to experience at some point in his or her life. Wrestling with these issues is what drive Ernesto and Alberto to a journey of self-discovery. What does self-discovery means? The word self-discovery means the way in which an individual discover his or her own identity. Alberto and Ernesto gained a face-to-face experience with social classes, and exploitation that led them on a journey of self-discovery. 0-
  

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0 here are some corrections... though I am not a native English speaker, though : 02br 02br 00- based on a true life story 02br 00- during the '50s 02br 00- is what drove 02br 00- an individual discovers 02br 00- social classes and exploitation 02br 02br 00That's all I can see... 02br 02br 00Good bye 0-

  • 0 here are some corrections...
  • though I am not a native English speaker, though : 02br 02br 00- based on a true life story 02br 00- during the '50s 02br 00- is what drove 02br 00- an individual discovers 02br 00- social classes and exploitation 02br 02br 00That's all I can see...
  • 02br 02br 00Good bye 0-
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0 here are some corrections... though I am not a native English speaker, though : 02br
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0 Thank you for your suggestions! I really appreciate your help! 0-
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0 Hi, 02br
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00I am not a native speaker either...nonetheless, I have found another thing in your intro: 02br
00- biochemist student --> biochemistry student 02br
00- understanding these issues IS essential IF WE WANT TO understand (consider changing one of the verbs....so that you do not repeat yourself) 02br
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0 Hi Pilita, 02br
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00"discovered the reality of a land ..." I think this would be better if you said "the realities..." 02br
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00"Understanding these issues are essential ..." should be "Understanding these issues IS ..." 02br
00because the verb agrees with "understanding" (singular) and not "issues(plural) 02br
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