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Anonymous Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Correct my Free-Verse poem?
I'm writing a poem for my English class and I want to know if I made any mistakes:
Everyone dies at one point
Some people get old and die
Others die young
However not many people are forgotten
For some people being forgotten is a curse
For others it's a burden lifted
Sometimes you just want to be forgotten
When you can't take the stress of being known
You wish you could drop off the face of the earth
Being forgotten seems so liberating
Being free from the corrupt clutches of society
So free yet so lonely
Thanks, I'm 14 so try and dumb things down.
Everyone dies at one point
Some people get old and die
Others die young
However not many people are forgotten
For some people being forgotten is a curse
For others it's a burden lifted
Sometimes you just want to be forgotten
When you can't take the stress of being known
You wish you could drop off the face of the earth
Being forgotten seems so liberating
Being free from the corrupt clutches of society
So free yet so lonely
Thanks, I'm 14 so try and dumb things down.
Top answer
The only change I would suggest is in your first line: Everyone dies at some point
- The only change I would suggest is in your first line: Everyone dies at some point
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The only change I would suggest is in your first line:
Everyone dies at some point
Everyone dies at some point
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