Correct my essay pleas

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Pleas, read my Essay, correct it, and tell me the reason .
thanks ahead .
To learn a foreign language successfully you need to spend time in the country where the language is spoken.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In order to learn anything, we always need to create the spirit of confident into it, and develope the interest gesture. For those whome are create an excuses to theirselves, I belevie it's very hard for them to ahevie their Goals, they end up being dffident .
In my opinoin, when it comes to languages, there is always a way to learn at least 50% of the language even if you are not at the countries where the language is spoken, by meomorizing the letters and watch a decoumentry in the contry's language, to understand more about their culture as well language itself.
I had an exprince learning the English language at the country where the people themself dont speak the English lanuage, But I manage to it . Sometimes we just have to create the motvition to ahcieve our goals . I deliberately dont agree with the author opinoin, nither disagree.
But I belevie you can learn the language sucessfully by communicating with the owners of the lanuage. But sometime, it is very diffcult for someone to go to the lcountr where the people speaks the langauge, or rather, not having the chance .
At last, I believe when someone wants to ahcieve something in this life, it can happen by creating the spirit of motivition in anything, people may not have the chance to learn, but it can happen when someone is persistent.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Hi xmagedo;

There are many many spelling mistakes in your essay. Please check your dictionary. I sometimes don't understand your sentences, so only have commented on the first two. Please also check your vocabulary.

In order to learn anything, we always need to create a the spirit of confidence ~~into it~~, and develope the interest ~~gesture~~. (gesture is a hand movement. It does not make sense here)
For those whome are create (this is not a correct verb phrase. Also, what is the subject? Whom is the object case of who, so it is not the subject.) an excuses (either an excuse or excuses. It is not correct to have a or an with a plural noun.) to theirselves (incorrect case, you need the object case, themselves), I belevie it's very hard for them to ahevie their Goals, (comma splice) they end up being dffident .

Xmagedo · Answer

Hi
Thank you very much for correcting my Essay, that was really nice of you .
Here is my Essay again, I correct the spelling

In order to learn anything, we always need to create the spirit of confident into it, and develop the interest gesture. For those whom are create an excuses to their-selves, I believe it's very hard for them to achieve their Goals, they end up being diffident .
In my opinion, when it comes to languages, there is always a way to learn at least 50% of the language even if you are not at the countries where the language is spoken, by memorizing the letters and watch a documentary in the country's language, to understand more about their culture as well language itself.
I had an experience learning the English language at the country where the people themselves dont speak the English language, But I manage to it . Sometimes we just have to create the motivation to achieve our goals . I deliberately dont agree with the author opinion, neither disagree.
But I believe you can learn the language successfully by communicating with the owners of the language. But sometime, it is very difficult for someone to go to the country where the people speaks the language, or rather, not having the chance .
At last, I believe when someone wants to achieve something in this life, it can happen by creating the spirit of motivation in anything, people may not have the chance to learn, but it can happen when someone is persistent.

I want to ask you a few questions that will help me in making essay next time with less mistakes .
* Now, In the first place you added " to create a the spirit of confidence, why is there a before the, because I never though it can be put in that way ?

* when can we use whom ?

Finally, * what do you mean about by gesture is a hand movement ?

pleas Explain it to me !

thank you very much for giving time to my essay .
take care

Mz31098 · Answer

Maybe, my English is not the worst. There are so many low-level mistakes in your essay.

AlpheccaStars meant to write "to create a spirit of confidence". There is not a "a" before the "the" which you referred to in his correction.

Whom is usually used in attributive clause. In modem English, it can be used exchangeable with who.
I'm not a professional teacher, so I can only give you examples about whom.

The boy whom you beat is weak.
= You beat the boy. + The boy is weak.

The person in whom our boss trust will be assigned this task.
=Our boss trust in the person. The person will be assigned this task.

Regarding gesture, there are two usage for this word.
1.a movement that you make with your hands, your head or your face to show a particular meaning
2. something that you do or say to show a particular feeling or intention

I don't know why you write gesture here, for it is irrelevant to the subject. Maybe you intended to use it as the second explain, but I don't think it is proper to use gesture.

Xmagedo · Answer

Thank you very much my friend.
Thanks for your time, you cleared all my doubts .

AlpheccaStars · Answer

xmagedo* Now, In the first place you added " to create a the spirit of confidence, why is there a before the, because I never though it can be put in that way ?

I apologize. The editing software is tedious to use here, and it is easy to make mistakes. I thought I had made a strike out on "the," and didn't catch my mistake on proofreading.

The correction is:
In order to learn anything, we always need to create a spirit of confidence ~~into it~~, and develop an interest in the subject ~~gesture~~.

Interest gesture makes no sense. I think you mean "develop interest in what you are trying to learn."

A gesture of "goodbye" is waving your hand in the air. A gesture of prayer is your hands, palms together, in front of your heart.

You cannot say "spirit of confident" because confident is an adjective, and cannot be the object of the preposition of. You must use the noun which is confidence.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

xmagedoFor those whom are create an excuses to their-selves, I believe it's very hard for them to achieve their Goals, they end up being diffident .

This has so many errors, that I can only rewrite it completely:

I believe it's very hard for people who create excuses for themselves to achieve their goals; they end up being unsuccessful.

Diffident does not really make sense here. It is not an end result, but perhaps one of the reasons why they make excuses - they lack confidence in themselves.
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In my opinion, when it comes to languages, there is always a way to learn at least 50% of the language even if you are not in the countries where the language is spoken: (colon, not a comma) by memorizing the letters and by watching a documentary in the country's language to understand more about their culture as well the language itself.

Note: You say "a way" (meaning one way) in the first part of your sentence, and you give two ways in the second part.

Xmagedo · Answer

Thank you very much AlpheccaStars, I learn a lot from this essay .
But I have one question and I need your help if you have time .
countries where the language is spoken: (colon, not a comma) Why is it colon not comma ?

thanks

AlpheccaStars · Answer

A colon tells the reader that a list (that you mentioned earlier) follows. It fits your sentence because you list 2 ways to learn.

Example:

A dictionary can be used for these purposes: to find word meanings, pronunciations, correct spellings, and irregular verbs.

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