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Gifee Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

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0 I've prepare myself in IELTS02br
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00Since year 1888, 112 years ago, the first vehicle was driven on the British roads. In these day, car usage number is dramatically rise, its cause a problem to many countries not only in Britain. I believed that there are another alternative ways of commuter in many of following ways02br
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00Nowadays, big city such as London, Tokyo and New York are encountered in traffic problem because of crowded people, most of people moved themselves from countryside to central of the city. They are rushing to work everyday and the most popular commuter is car, due to its convenient more than other methods. But the more cars on street the more pollution city is, thus its emission of CO2, carbon dioxide. CO2 is categorized in greenhouse gas, which is a primary cause of global warming.02br
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00Recently, there are a number of international policies are launched in order to reduce world environmental crisis. According to the car usage, there is a scheme that charge the car owner whenever they are driving into central of the city, a congestion charge. This plan can reduce number of people using carin the core of the town. Furthermore, another choice of transportation is a public transport system, for instance bus, train and subway. The government should encorage its people to use a lot of these commuter, thus it may reduce traffic and polution.02br
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00In conclusion, reduction of car usage is an issue that should be promoted because of it is one of the environmental friendly method. Moreover, the public transport system must be convenient to use in case of people will like to travel with it.0-
  

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0 You need to work on your basic grammar, Gifee, esp. 02br 02br 01font 00Since year 1888,02font 00 112 years ago, the first vehicle was driven on the British roads. In 01b 00these day02b 00, car usage 01font 00number is02font 00 dramatically 01font 00rise02font 00, 01font 00its cause a problem02font 00 to many countries not only in Britain.

  • 0 You need to work on your basic grammar, Gifee, esp.
  • 02br 02br 01font 00Since year 1888,02font 00 112 years ago, the first vehicle was driven on the British roads.
  • In 01b 00these day02b 00, car usage 01font 00number is02font 00 dramatically 01font 00rise02font 00, 01font 00its cause a problem02font 00 to many countries not only in Britain.
  • I believed that there 01font 00are another02font 00 alternative ways of 01font 00commuter02font 00 01font 00in many of following ways02br 02font 0-
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0 You need to work on your basic grammar, Gifee, esp. your singular/plural agreement.02br
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01font00Since year 1888,02font00 112 years ago, the first vehicle was driven on the British roads. In 01b00these day02b00, car usage 01font00number is02font00 dramatically 0

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