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Royee george Posted 22 years ago
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i am pasting some of my passage down.May u correct it for me
It is my wish to appeal against the decision taken on my application by the esteemed home office early last month as it is giving our family a very pathetic situation which I encounter in my 40 years life time. May you consider the following humanitarian aspects and technical issues favour to me and approve the above said application.
BACKGROUND OF IMMIGRATION AS A MATHEMATICS TEACHER
I was teaching together with my wife Selin Royee in South Africa for 10 years as Maths, IT and science teachers .The school was achieving excellent result in all subjects .In 2002 August One of the school from Derby County Council offer me a job as full time Mathematics teacher .(Annexure 1) I received the offer and we resign our Job .I was employed as an unqualified teacher and through one year training (NQT 3) I could come as a qualified teacher in Maths. The school management had put me on a training programme (Annexure 2)
MY BLACK DAY-13TH FEB 2003
On the way to my work on 13th Feb 2003 I had involved in a road traffic accident and one victim had been died as a result of the third parties careless driving. The police authority could prove that I am innocent in this tragically apprehended accident. (Annexure 3)
As a result of this accident I came ill and unhealthy to proceed my job and the above said NQT training. (Annexure 4)
Because of my long absence I had been effected the policy of redundancy and lost my job.
MY CHILDREN’S FUTURE
I had two children of 13 years boy and 6 years girl learning Year 8 and year 2 respectively. Even though their dad is a victim of the accident, both of them are top stars of the school. (Annexure 5).My son was one of the participants of the Maths challenge 2004 in the school level. One of my main reasons to come England is my children. It is their wish to come England and study They never learned in my home country, India. They have no experience in my mother tong and in the system of education. If they are going back to our home country at this stage obviously they will loose their better future
OUR SOCIAL INVOLVEMENT
My family is Catholic. I was national secretary of one of the layman association in India. Before the tragic accident I laid down my devotional attitude to the church in England as well. Now I am a dedicated active member of the parish of 700 families. The church appointed me as a Foundation governor of one of their school locally. (Annexure 6) .The church is training me as a Eucharist minister.
My wife is a well trained childminder and she is giving her service to some NHS working families (Annex 7)
We two are trained in adult literacy training programme and we are helping both Pakistan and local communities to eradicate the illiteracy ,the cancer of the society.
PTO
CONCLUSION
From my two years short stay I experienced England as a land of people of trust worth, humanitarians, and loving neighbourhoods. And it is our ambition to discharge our skills and enamours cultural values for our loving community
My current psychological and physical health is not allow me to go straight to class room. But it is my wish to come back to my carrier as a teacher. The intention of the school which applied for work permit is also the same.
I slipped from my track .I need a hand to come back to my track.
I am appealing to the respected business team to consider my current situation and approve the application for work permit favour to me and my family
A LETTER OF APPEAL FROM THE SCHOOL IS ALSO ATTACHED
Thank you
SIGNED BY: ROYEE GEORGE:………………..
AT……………………………….......................
ON … TH DAY OF ……………MONTH 2004
i am pasting some of my passage down.May u correct it for me
It is my wish to appeal against the decision taken on my application by the esteemed home office early last month as it is giving our family a very pathetic situation which I encounter in my 40 years life time. May you consider the following humanitarian aspects and technical issues favour to me and approve the above said application.
BACKGROUND OF IMMIGRATION AS A MATHEMATICS TEACHER
I was teaching together with my wife Selin Royee in South Africa for 10 years as Maths, IT and science teachers .The school was achieving excellent result in all subjects .In 2002 August One of the school from Derby County Council offer me a job as full time Mathematics teacher .(Annexure 1) I received the offer and we resign our Job .I was employed as an unqualified teacher and through one year training (NQT 3) I could come as a qualified teacher in Maths. The school management had put me on a training programme (Annexure 2)
MY BLACK DAY-13TH FEB 2003
On the way to my work on 13th Feb 2003 I had involved in a road traffic accident and one victim had been died as a result of the third parties careless driving. The police authority could prove that I am innocent in this tragically apprehended accident. (Annexure 3)
As a result of this accident I came ill and unhealthy to proceed my job and the above said NQT training. (Annexure 4)
Because of my long absence I had been effected the policy of redundancy and lost my job.
MY CHILDREN’S FUTURE
I had two children of 13 years boy and 6 years girl learning Year 8 and year 2 respectively. Even though their dad is a victim of the accident, both of them are top stars of the school. (Annexure 5).My son was one of the participants of the Maths challenge 2004 in the school level. One of my main reasons to come England is my children. It is their wish to come England and study They never learned in my home country, India. They have no experience in my mother tong and in the system of education. If they are going back to our home country at this stage obviously they will loose their better future
OUR SOCIAL INVOLVEMENT
My family is Catholic. I was national secretary of one of the layman association in India. Before the tragic accident I laid down my devotional attitude to the church in England as well. Now I am a dedicated active member of the parish of 700 families. The church appointed me as a Foundation governor of one of their school locally. (Annexure 6) .The church is training me as a Eucharist minister.
My wife is a well trained childminder and she is giving her service to some NHS working families (Annex 7)
We two are trained in adult literacy training programme and we are helping both Pakistan and local communities to eradicate the illiteracy ,the cancer of the society.
PTO
CONCLUSION
From my two years short stay I experienced England as a land of people of trust worth, humanitarians, and loving neighbourhoods. And it is our ambition to discharge our skills and enamours cultural values for our loving community
My current psychological and physical health is not allow me to go straight to class room. But it is my wish to come back to my carrier as a teacher. The intention of the school which applied for work permit is also the same.
I slipped from my track .I need a hand to come back to my track.
I am appealing to the respected business team to consider my current situation and approve the application for work permit favour to me and my family
A LETTER OF APPEAL FROM THE SCHOOL IS ALSO ATTACHED
Thank you
SIGNED BY: ROYEE GEORGE:………………..
AT……………………………….......................
ON … TH DAY OF ……………MONTH 2004
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Hi, I have went through you message and I did my best to correct it (it comes after my comments here). I only know American English, so it may not perfectly fit British English. I need a hand to come back to my track.
- Hi, I have went through you message and I did my best to correct it (it comes after my comments here).
- I only know American English, so it may not perfectly fit British English.
- I need a hand to come back to my track.
- to: I slipped off my track and I need a hand to get back on track.
- This should be the only instance of American style English that the British may not use.
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Hi, I have went through you message and I did my best to correct it (it comes after my
comments here). I only know American English, so it may not perfectly fit British English. I
changed:
I slipped from my track .I need a hand to come back to my track.
to:
I slipped off my track and I need a hand to get back on track.
This should be the only instance of
comments here). I only know American English, so it may not perfectly fit British English. I
changed:
I slipped from my track .I need a hand to come back to my track.
to:
I slipped off my track and I need a hand to get back on track.
This should be the only instance of
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