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Anonymous Posted 8 years ago
Grammar

Correct?

She looked at her mother, searching some kind of reaction from her, but she was just quiet.

Is this correct?

Thanks.

  

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I don't like that final "she". I had to go back and pick one of the two females in the sentence, just for a microsecond, but that is too long. Also, you're missing a word.

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  • I don't like that final "she".
  • I had to go back and pick one of the two females in the sentence, just for a microsecond, but that is too long.
  • Also, you're missing a word.
  • "
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I don't like that final "she". I had to go back and pick one of the two females in the sentence, just for a microsecond, but that is too long. Also, you're missing a word. Maybe "Doris looked at her mother, searching for some kind of reaction from her, but she was just quiet."

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Is "seeking" a better word to use?

She looked at her mother, seeking some kind of reaction from her. But she was just quiet.

Is this better?

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