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Mcgagliardi Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

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Please, tell me whether these ideas are clearly conveyed.

We need to identify those elements around us that contribute to or prevent us from obtaining our goal; as in a war-like tactic, we may speak of our allies and our enemies. Our enemies can be identified quite easily; for instance, disturbing noises. On the other hand, our allies are far less conspicuous, so they must be created. The point is to use environmental or social pressure to support us in the pursuit of our goal or to make it difficult for us to abandon the intention, for example by:

? inviting someone to work with us;

? rewarding ourselves.



Thanks.
  

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I have underlined some problem areas: We need to identify those elements around us that contribute to or prevent us from obtaining our goal; as in a war-like tactic , we may speak of our allies and our enemies. Our enemies can be identified quite easily; for instance, disturbing noises. On the other hand, our allies are far less conspicuous, so they must be created.

  • I have underlined some problem areas: We need to identify those elements around us that contribute to or prevent us from obtaining our goal; as in a war-like tactic , we may speak of our allies and our enemies.
  • Our enemies can be identified quite easily; for instance, disturbing noises.
  • On the other hand, our allies are far less conspicuous, so they must be created.
  • The point is to use environmental or social pressure to support us in the pursuit of our goal or to make it difficult for us to abandon the intention, for example by inviting someone to work with us and/or rewarding ourselves.
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I have underlined some problem areas:

We need to identify those elements around us that contribute to or prevent us from obtaining our goal; as in a war-like tactic, we may speak of our allies and our enemies. Our enemies can be identified quite easily; for instance, disturbing noises. On the other hand, our allies are far less conspicuous, so they mu

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