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JimmyH Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

COOP

I'd like to avail the opportunity of co-op by trying my best to get an intern/co-op job as early as possible to not only get a hands-on experience but also help expand my connections in a work-place that will come in handy in finding professional jobs after I graduate.

Does anybody see any problem in the sentence above? Thanks
  

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Huzaifa Asif Does anybody see any problem in the sentence above? Yes. It is too wordy, it is of mixed register, and some words are misused.

— Mister Micawber

  • Huzaifa Asif Does anybody see any problem in the sentence above?
  • Yes.
  • It is too wordy, it is of mixed register, and some words are misused.
  • I would like to obtain an intern/co-op position to gain hands-on experience and expand my opportunities for finding professional employment after graduation.
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Huzaifa AsifDoes anybody see any problem in the sentence above?
Yes. It is too wordy, it is of mixed register, and some words are misused.

I would like to obtain an intern/co-op position to gain hands-on experience and expand my opportunities for finding professional employment after graduation.
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