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Stenka25 Posted 13 years ago
Vocabulary
Conjunction problem
The sentences presented below is from a test question. What I want to asking about is the propriety of the underlined conjunction, BUT.
But general criticism is destructive. It doesn't lead anyone to know how to fix things; it just makes people feel bad. We all have different verbal and visual styles and conceive different ways to say the same thing.But, unless you can explain specifically, you haven't started fixing anything.
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I’m not sure why the writer of this paragraph used “but.” So I changed it on my own way like the following.
But general criticism is destructive. It doesn't lead anyone to know how to fix things; it just makes people feel bad. [For] We all have different verbal and visual styles and conceive different ways to say the same thing. ButTherefore, unless you can explain specifically, you haven't started fixing anything.
I substituted ‘therefore’ for ‘but’ because this sentence shows the consequence of the preceding one.
[Of course, sentences with too many conjunctions are not good. But this paragraph left me with no other choice to get my argument across.]
Can you give me a help?
But general criticism is destructive. It doesn't lead anyone to know how to fix things; it just makes people feel bad. We all have different verbal and visual styles and conceive different ways to say the same thing.But, unless you can explain specifically, you haven't started fixing anything.
[If you want more context, check out the website as follows : http://www.exam4you.com/bbs/zboard.php?id=com_02&no=15499]
I’m not sure why the writer of this paragraph used “but.” So I changed it on my own way like the following.
But general criticism is destructive. It doesn't lead anyone to know how to fix things; it just makes people feel bad. [For] We all have different verbal and visual styles and conceive different ways to say the same thing. ButTherefore, unless you can explain specifically, you haven't started fixing anything.
I substituted ‘therefore’ for ‘but’ because this sentence shows the consequence of the preceding one.
[Of course, sentences with too many conjunctions are not good. But this paragraph left me with no other choice to get my argument across.]
Can you give me a help?
Top answer
It's a poorly written passage, in my opinion. Sorry, but I don't think your changes make it any better. Maybe worse.
- It's a poorly written passage, in my opinion.
- Sorry, but I don't think your changes make it any better.
- Maybe worse.
- How about this?
- But general criticism is destructive.
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It's a poorly written passage, in my opinion. Sorry, but I don't think your changes make it any better. Maybe worse.
How about this?
But general criticism is destructive. It doesn't lead anyone to know how to fix things; it just makes people feel bad. We all have different verbal an
How about this?
But general criticism is destructive. It doesn't lead anyone to know how to fix things; it just makes people feel bad. We all have different verbal an
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The original text is okay. This is about general criticism. Something was said about general criticism before this passage. Then this passage qualifies what was previously said: "But general criticism is ...." The "but" here indicates a qualification of what was previously said.
The within the passage you have the statement, "We all have different...to day the same thing.", which a
The within the passage you have the statement, "We all have different...to day the same thing.", which a
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