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The_Nail Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing
Computer scientist cover letter
Hi all,
This is my first post on this forum. I am currently writing my cover letter for a future job in England (i hope so
)
I read the recommendations threads and used some samples to write that following draft :
My Name Town, Date
My adress
Me email
My tel
Dear Sir, Madam,
Please accept this letter and the accompanying resume as an application for the system administrator position at COMPANY_NAME in London, which would suit my profile and expectations.
I graduated with a B.A. in Network and System Administration in France, which I obtained with highest honors.
Upon graduation, I follow a three months course in Unix/Linux system administration and Shell programming at Cap Gemini Institute in Paris.
Then, I first worked for ten months as a system administrator at COMPANY_NAME in TOWN where I was in charge of a various network of twenty Unix/Linux/Windows 2000 servers. Furthermore, to make day to day administration tasks easier and faster, I wrote several Korn Shell and VBScript tools.
I then worked for one year as a production support analyst at COMPANY_NAME’s IT Department in TOWN. Over this time, my key function was to design and implement the banking datawarehouse job scheduling under Unix and Oracle using Dollar Universe. I also insured on a daily basis that all batches where correctly driven and I improved existing scripts. Another part of my job was to provide technical assistance to end users and to present them new processes organisation.
To reinforce and intensify my interest in Unix system, I completed a course in AIX5L administration at IBM Training Center in Paris.
Afterwards and until recently, I worked as a AIX and TSM system administrator at COMPANY_NAME, a software editor for French mutual funds companies based near TOWN. I was responsible for up to thirty AIX/Linux development platforms, and four Windows 2000 domain servers. In addition, I managed a tera-bytes IBM ESS storage capacity and maintained the TSM backup environment.
I consider myself creative and reactive, as well as flexible and energetic team player.
Furthermore, with the qualities I’ve developed and strengthened during previous jobs, I can offer my meticulous organizational skills as well as my ability to accomplish my tasks and assignments on or ahead of schedule.
My resume is enclosed for your consideration but obviously, it is not easy to convey my interpersonal skills on paper, therefore I look forward to meeting you to discuss the position in more detail.
Sincerely
MY NAME
I know there are some (many) mistakes and heavy sentences. And writing about IT knowledge is pretty tricky. I find some difficulties to be precise and clearly understood.
Moreover, how and where could I say that I spent 4 months as a trainee in an english hotel?
I hope you will give me previous advises
Thanks by advance
This is my first post on this forum. I am currently writing my cover letter for a future job in England (i hope so
)I read the recommendations threads and used some samples to write that following draft :
My Name Town, Date
My adress
Me email
My tel
Dear Sir, Madam,
Please accept this letter and the accompanying resume as an application for the system administrator position at COMPANY_NAME in London, which would suit my profile and expectations.
I graduated with a B.A. in Network and System Administration in France, which I obtained with highest honors.
Upon graduation, I follow a three months course in Unix/Linux system administration and Shell programming at Cap Gemini Institute in Paris.
Then, I first worked for ten months as a system administrator at COMPANY_NAME in TOWN where I was in charge of a various network of twenty Unix/Linux/Windows 2000 servers. Furthermore, to make day to day administration tasks easier and faster, I wrote several Korn Shell and VBScript tools.
I then worked for one year as a production support analyst at COMPANY_NAME’s IT Department in TOWN. Over this time, my key function was to design and implement the banking datawarehouse job scheduling under Unix and Oracle using Dollar Universe. I also insured on a daily basis that all batches where correctly driven and I improved existing scripts. Another part of my job was to provide technical assistance to end users and to present them new processes organisation.
To reinforce and intensify my interest in Unix system, I completed a course in AIX5L administration at IBM Training Center in Paris.
Afterwards and until recently, I worked as a AIX and TSM system administrator at COMPANY_NAME, a software editor for French mutual funds companies based near TOWN. I was responsible for up to thirty AIX/Linux development platforms, and four Windows 2000 domain servers. In addition, I managed a tera-bytes IBM ESS storage capacity and maintained the TSM backup environment.
I consider myself creative and reactive, as well as flexible and energetic team player.
Furthermore, with the qualities I’ve developed and strengthened during previous jobs, I can offer my meticulous organizational skills as well as my ability to accomplish my tasks and assignments on or ahead of schedule.
My resume is enclosed for your consideration but obviously, it is not easy to convey my interpersonal skills on paper, therefore I look forward to meeting you to discuss the position in more detail.
Sincerely
MY NAME
I know there are some (many) mistakes and heavy sentences. And writing about IT knowledge is pretty tricky. I find some difficulties to be precise and clearly understood.
Moreover, how and where could I say that I spent 4 months as a trainee in an english hotel?
I hope you will give me previous advises
Thanks by advance
Top answer
Hi, I would keep all the lists of experience in your resume and make the letter more about selling yourself personally and emphasise the things that won't come across in your resume, for example your organisational skills. Otherwise you are just repeating information and boring the person going through the applications. The letter should be used to make them want to read your resume.
- Hi, I would keep all the lists of experience in your resume and make the letter more about selling yourself personally and emphasise the things that won't come across in your resume, for example your organisational skills.
- Otherwise you are just repeating information and boring the person going through the applications.
- The letter should be used to make them want to read your resume.
- I would also include in this letter your prior experience of living in England.
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Hi,
I would keep all the lists of experience in your resume and make the letter more about selling yourself personally and emphasise the things that won't come across in your resume, for example your organisational skills. Otherwise you are just repeating information and boring the person going through the applications. The letter should be used to make them want to read your resume.
I would keep all the lists of experience in your resume and make the letter more about selling yourself personally and emphasise the things that won't come across in your resume, for example your organisational skills. Otherwise you are just repeating information and boring the person going through the applications. The letter should be used to make them want to read your resume.
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Ok thank you for your answer.
Here is a new version of this letter :
Dear Sir, Madam,
Please accept this letter and the accompanying resume as an application for the system administrator position at COMPANY_NAME in London, which would suit my profile and expectations.
As a BA in network and system administration graduate, which I obtained with highes
Here is a new version of this letter :
Dear Sir, Madam,
Please accept this letter and the accompanying resume as an application for the system administrator position at COMPANY_NAME in London, which would suit my profile and expectations.
As a BA in network and system administration graduate, which I obtained with highes
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Hi,
I think this is better. Just a couple of things for you.
1st paragraph
'which would suit my profile and expectations.' - they are interested in why you will suit their profile and expectations, they don't care what you want! Re-phrase this a bit.
This is also a good point to introduce the fact that you have worked in Uk before. Something like 'In *** I s
I think this is better. Just a couple of things for you.
1st paragraph
'which would suit my profile and expectations.' - they are interested in why you will suit their profile and expectations, they don't care what you want! Re-phrase this a bit.
This is also a good point to introduce the fact that you have worked in Uk before. Something like 'In *** I s
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Ok thanks a lot for your help !
1st paragraph
'which may suit my profile and your expectations' => Is this any better?
end of the third paragraph :
'Finally, in 1999 I spent 4 months working in Oxford Stage Hotel to better my English fluency.'
=> Is it ok (is "finally" correctly used?)
Thank you very much again,
1st paragraph
'which may suit my profile and your expectations' => Is this any better?
end of the third paragraph :
'Finally, in 1999 I spent 4 months working in Oxford Stage Hotel to better my English fluency.'
=> Is it ok (is "finally" correctly used?)
Thank you very much again,
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