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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
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Nowadays, with the advance of technology, sending instant messages on the net is getting more and more popular . People prefer sending messages by typing to giving phone call. That is because most of the electronic products ,such as computers and smartphones, have the function of surfing the net, and are widely used by people all over the world. People can not only send and get the messages instantly, but don’t have to pay the high expense of the phone fee. Therefore, this kind of communication way has become a trend in people’s lives.
On the other hand, this new way of communication has two potential problems.Firstly, students may neglect their studies since they spend too much time chatting with their friends on the net. Secondly, people may have problems with their relationships if they always interact with people in this way . Thus, even if new way of communication is changing people’s lives, we still have to interact with people in reality: for instance companying with our family and friends. To conclude, despite a substantial breakthrough had been achieved in technology, I personally believe that we shouldn't be limited by the convenience that was brought by the advanced technology.
  

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Hello Anon; You did not ask a question, but I assume you want some feedback on your composition. First, in the introduction, you need to state your thesis. A thesis is a statement of what your essay is about.

  • Hello Anon; You did not ask a question, but I assume you want some feedback on your composition.
  • First, in the introduction, you need to state your thesis.
  • A thesis is a statement of what your essay is about.
  • I don't see any thesis statement in your essay, but it seems like it is an argumentative essay with pros and cons.
  • Your essay should have the following structure: Paragraph 1.
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Hello Anon;

You did not ask a question, but I assume you want some feedback on your composition.

First, in the introduction, you need to state your thesis. A thesis is a statement of what your essay is about. I don't see any thesis statement in your essay, but it seems like it is an argumentative essay with pros and cons.

Your essay should have the following structure:

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