Composition

Hello everyone,

Could you please tell me if there is any mistake in my composition?

In the video clip, the boy sees a girl for the first time, he falls in love with her. He goes after her wherever she goes and watches her secretly. One day, he buys a camera and takes a photo of her. At first the girl doesn't appreciate the boy, but then she changes her mind and one day she leaves a piece of cloth on a small tree for the boy. The boy picks it and flags it with happiness while running on the beach. Unfortunately, at the end of the video the boy dies in the sea due to a shark and the waves of the sea take the camera and the photo to the shore.

Regards,

JA