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It was one of the worst commute days that John had ever had. When he left his house in the morning, he didn't have an umbrella with him because he never cared about weather news; however, he had a habit, he always looked up the sky when he felt like it. It was clear yet the sun didn't set. He walked quietly down to the coffee job to get his bagel and muffin and juice. Then he headed to the train station. As he saw train in sight from the coffee shop, he scurried to the train station. He always went to the last car and sat in same spot and met almost the same people. As usual he didn't care that he ate on the train. The train went smoothly for him in the morning.

As soon as John got off the building, there was thunder; storm and heavy rain came down. He had no place to shelter himself in the middle of the street. Immediately he became soaking. When he got to the train station, he heard the beat and saw the door closing, and train left. John alone sitting in the bench waited the train.

Are these passages correct?

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Julielai · Accepted Answer

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AnonymousIt was one of the worst commute days that John had ever had. When he left his house in the morning, he didn't have an umbrella with him because he never cared about the weather forecast; however, he had a habit, he always looked up the sky when he felt like it. It was clear yet the sun didn't set (is this morning?). He walked quietly down to the coffee job to get his bagel and muffin and juice. Then he headed to the train station. As he saw the train in sight from the coffee shop, he scurried to the train station. He always went to the last car and sat in same spot and met almost the same people. As usual he didn't care that he ate on the train. The train went smoothly for him in the morning.

(The evening?) As soon as John got off the building (which building), there was thunder; storm and heavy rain came down. He had no place to shelter himself in the middle of the street. Immediately he became soaking. When he got to the train station, he heard the beat (is that how it sounds?) and saw the door closing, and the train left. John alone sitting in the bench waited the train.

BW2/3 · Answer

Thank you very much Julie,

It was one of the worst commute days.

How do I fix the above?

Julielai · Answer

one of the worst commutes?

BW2/3 · Answer

JulielaiHighlighted some of the more glaring errors for you.
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It was one of the worst commutes that John had ever had. When he left his house in the morning, he didn't have an umbrella with him because he never cared about the weather forecast; however, he always looked up the sky when he felt like it. It was clear but the sun didn't set in this morning. He walked quietly to the coffe shop to get his bagel and muffin and juice. Then he headed to the train station. As he saw the train ifrom the coffee shop, he scurried to the train station. He always went to the last car and sat in same spot and met almost the same people. As usual he didn't care that he ate on the train. The train went smoothly for him in the morning.

As soon as John got out the Hooot building on the afternoon, there was thunder, storm and heavy rain. He had no place to shelter himself in the middle of the street. Immediately he became soak. When he got to the train station, he heard the beat (is that how it sounds?) and saw the door closing, and the train left. Sitting alone in the desolate train station, John had to wait for next train.

Julielai · Answer

Highlighted some of the more glaring errors for you.

It was one of the worst commutes that John had ever had. When he left his house in the morning, he didn't have an umbrella with him because he never cared about the weather forecast; however, he always looked up the sky when he felt like it. It was clear but the sun didn't set in this morning. He walked quietly to the coffe shop to get his bagel and muffin and juice. Then he headed to the train station. As he saw the train ifrom the coffee shop, he scurried to the train station. He always went to the last car and sat in same spot and met almost the same people. As usual he didn't care that he ate on the train. The train went smoothly for him in the morning.

As soon as John got out ___ the Hooot building (What building was that? Why was he there?) on the afternoon, there was thunder, storm and heavy rain. He had no place to shelter himself in the middle of the street. Immediately he became soak__. When he got to the train station, he heard the beat (is that how it sounds?) and saw the door closing, and the train left. Sitting alone in the desolate train station, John had to wait for ___ next train.

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JulielaiHighlighted some of the more glaring errors for you.

It was one of the worst commutes that John had ever had. When he left his house in the morning, he didn't have an umbrella with him because he never cared about the weather forecast; however, he always looked up the sky when he felt like it. It was clear but the sun didn't raise in this morning. He walked quietly to the coffe shop to get his bagel and muffin and juice. Then he headed to the train station. As he saw the train ifrom the coffee shop, he scurried to the train station. He always went to the last car and sat in same spot and met almost the same people. As usual he didn't care that he ate on the train. The train went smoothly for him in the morning.

As soon as John got out of the Hooot building where he worke in the afternoon, there was thunder, storm and heavy rain. He had no place to shelter himself in the middle of the street. Immediately he became soaked. When he got to the train station, he heard the beat (is that how it sounds?) and saw the door closing, and the train left. Sitting alone in the desolate train station, John had to wait for the next train.

Thank you very much, Julie.

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