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Belaidi Posted 16 years ago
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Hi,
I'm a new member. My aim is to write correctly in english. I wrote those paragraphs and i need comments or remarks, if any, on the quality of my writing:
It was a Saturday, the sun raises high in the sky, and a cold breeze tackles the leaves of trees. Birds singing add to the beauty of the day. Saturday is a day off in Morocco (week-end). And as I was alone, I spent all day in Down Town. A library I visited in the morning. I entered there at 12h20, but I didn’t have enough time to search for a book that could interest me, for the library close at 12h30 and reopen at 15h00. So I waited until 15h00 strokes and got back there.
I spent almost all the time between Midday to 15h00 in a snack in Agdal District, where I took my lunch and drank a cafe. I profited from the occasion and finished reading “About God”, a book written by Krishnamurti. I was absorbed in my reading when the phone rang; it was my wife in the other end of the line. After greetings, I informed her that I was planning to buy a book. She didn’t accept and begged me not to, for we don’t have much money even for securing food provisions. I agreed grudgingly. My brain afterwards was a field of battles between my desire and the pangs of conscience, for I’m a fervent lover of books and any occasion I let go without buying one, I would feel upset. So, all the time I was staying in the snack, I would skip from a decision to another. Now I decide to be back there and buy a book, and now I declare to myself that it would be better to finish reading the books I have and only then can I thought about buying new ones.
In fact, my greatest passion is books. Whenever I got, I seek nothing but to buy them. I can spend hours on end in a bookshop, return the next day and start examining the very books I examined the previous day, without feeling the slightest pang of bore. For sure, I inherited this from my late father. With the small difference, that for him buying books and reading them was in the realm of his profession (for he was a professor of French language), and for my case it is a passion that has nothing to do with my profession, as an engineer in telecommunications field.
Now I can declare for sure that I have discovered at least one of my passions: buying books. It implies another one: Reading them. At least 50 books I have read until today, at the age of 33 years. It’s not enough, but compared to the average books read by an Arabian in a lifelong, it is a huge number.
I read several kinds of books: literature, history and philosophy. In fact those fields interest me more than any other. It goes without saying that my passion for scientific articles is not impacted at all by this. But the new fact is that I read in English, not French. My principle goal is to practice this language, to learn it very well. Now that I have reached my aim, I should track the new one. As a matter of fact, when I have the ability to read, write, speak and understand a language, I should use it in communicating, understanding things and by this enhancing my carrier.
I'm a new member. My aim is to write correctly in english. I wrote those paragraphs and i need comments or remarks, if any, on the quality of my writing:
It was a Saturday, the sun raises high in the sky, and a cold breeze tackles the leaves of trees. Birds singing add to the beauty of the day. Saturday is a day off in Morocco (week-end). And as I was alone, I spent all day in Down Town. A library I visited in the morning. I entered there at 12h20, but I didn’t have enough time to search for a book that could interest me, for the library close at 12h30 and reopen at 15h00. So I waited until 15h00 strokes and got back there.
I spent almost all the time between Midday to 15h00 in a snack in Agdal District, where I took my lunch and drank a cafe. I profited from the occasion and finished reading “About God”, a book written by Krishnamurti. I was absorbed in my reading when the phone rang; it was my wife in the other end of the line. After greetings, I informed her that I was planning to buy a book. She didn’t accept and begged me not to, for we don’t have much money even for securing food provisions. I agreed grudgingly. My brain afterwards was a field of battles between my desire and the pangs of conscience, for I’m a fervent lover of books and any occasion I let go without buying one, I would feel upset. So, all the time I was staying in the snack, I would skip from a decision to another. Now I decide to be back there and buy a book, and now I declare to myself that it would be better to finish reading the books I have and only then can I thought about buying new ones.
In fact, my greatest passion is books. Whenever I got, I seek nothing but to buy them. I can spend hours on end in a bookshop, return the next day and start examining the very books I examined the previous day, without feeling the slightest pang of bore. For sure, I inherited this from my late father. With the small difference, that for him buying books and reading them was in the realm of his profession (for he was a professor of French language), and for my case it is a passion that has nothing to do with my profession, as an engineer in telecommunications field.
Now I can declare for sure that I have discovered at least one of my passions: buying books. It implies another one: Reading them. At least 50 books I have read until today, at the age of 33 years. It’s not enough, but compared to the average books read by an Arabian in a lifelong, it is a huge number.
I read several kinds of books: literature, history and philosophy. In fact those fields interest me more than any other. It goes without saying that my passion for scientific articles is not impacted at all by this. But the new fact is that I read in English, not French. My principle goal is to practice this language, to learn it very well. Now that I have reached my aim, I should track the new one. As a matter of fact, when I have the ability to read, write, speak and understand a language, I should use it in communicating, understanding things and by this enhancing my carrier.
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Hi, I'm a new member. My aim is to write correctly in english. I wrote those paragraphs and i need comments or remarks, if any, on the quality of my writing: You write carefuly and well.
- Hi, I'm a new member.
- My aim is to write correctly in english.
- I wrote those paragraphs and i need comments or remarks, if any, on the quality of my writing: You write carefuly and well.
- Many of your mistakes are just because you have not said things the way a native speaker naturally would.
- Please ask if you have any questions about my edits.
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Hi,
I'm a new member. My aim is to write correctly in english. I wrote those paragraphs and i need comments or remarks, if any, on the quality of my writing:
You write carefuly and well. Many of your mistakes are just because you have not said things the way a native speaker naturally would.
Please ask if you have any questions about my edits.
I'm a new member. My aim is to write correctly in english. I wrote those paragraphs and i need comments or remarks, if any, on the quality of my writing:
You write carefuly and well. Many of your mistakes are just because you have not said things the way a native speaker naturally would.
Please ask if you have any questions about my edits.
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