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I need either comments, criticism or suggestion for my essay. They guideline for the essay says, "Write a clear and detailed description of your objectives. Give reasons for wanting to participate in the program. Explain how the FLTA Program fits with your previous education/training and your future objectives. Describe your future plans.” Does this essay fit to the guideline?

One day, when I was in the elementary school of fifth grade, my eldest sister played a CD which the song had unfamiliar language in my ears, but somehow I just liked the song. My sister told me that it was English language which was used by the singer. She kept playing the whole songs in that album and I started falling in love with the songs, it was not because of the singer or the lyric actually, but it was more about how it sounded in my ear. It was M2M, a duo vocal group that attracted my interest in English by their songs for the first time. Of course, my sister also played an important role, she used to bring a new album of English songs whenever she came home from Palangka Raya, a city where she studied at that time. The place where we live, Pangkalan Bun, was a little city at that time; therefore, the educational access for certain subjects such as English and Science was quite difficult. My sister knew that English would be important later, so she told me to prepare myself to be getting used to English. Picture dictionary and bilingual dictionary were the first stuffs I got to learn more about English. My sister, accidently, kept introducing me to the English from her hobby in listening to music because while she was doing her hobby, I tried to translate the lyrics word by word to gain vocabularies as many as I could. My goal at that time was simple, I wanted to be able to understand every English word I heard and I could pronounce the words as resemble as the singer did.
From the experience above, my interest in English was getting higher as I found the fun and my passion when I knew and learnt more about it in junior and senior high school. Because of my interest, at that time, I ever decided my future plan to be a translator or interpreter. Then, in the third grade of senior high school, my future plan was totally changed because of my teacher, Ms. Muawanah. The way she taught in the class was never boring, she could explain any difficult material in interesting ways. All I can remember about her, until now, are her wisdom and integrity in teaching. That figure, in fact, changed my future plan slowly. Furthermore, seeing how good she was doing her job at that time made me want to be remembered as a person who is able to share the knowledge and inspire other people. To make them true, all that I could think about was to be a teacher who was able not only to share knowledge but also motivate and inspire the students. Finally, I decided to study in the English Education Study Program, Teacher Training Faculty of Palangka Raya University. My passion in English eased me to comprehend what I learnt there, so I could study there for only 3 years 10 months with a cumlaude citation since my GPA reached 3.77.
I have been familiar in teaching activity since I was in the third year in the college and in the last year of my study, I was asked to be a laboratory assistant for Listening Comprehension 3 subject for a semester. Now, I am teaching English in SMK Bhakti Indonesia Medika Pangkalan Bun and a lecturer in STIKES Borneo Cendikia Medika for about six months. Both school and college have majority in medical study.
Experience what you learnt, is something that I want to deliver to my students, to make them realize that studying is not about reading thick book or memorizing theory and formula but it is more about how they can apply what they learnt in their life. Before doing that, of course, as a teacher I should experience what I learnt first. For that reason, getting involved in this program is one of the ways which will not only support my goal to experience my study but also to get more knowledge in teaching learning process, teaching method and share what I have as an Indonesian there. By experiencing them, I know that it will be easier for me to motivate and inspire my students in their learning process which becomes my duty and responsibility as a teacher and an educator, later.