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Myvi Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
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Are these sentences correct in grammatical manner?
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1. Thesis topic is requested to be changed.
1. Thesis topic is changed.
2. Abstract is requires some slight modification.
2. Abstract is modified.
3. A sentence “ABC” need to cite the reference.
3. A sentence is cited.
4. Objectives are needs to rewrite.
4. Objectives are rewritten.
5. Scope and limitation is requires some slight modification.
5. Scope and limitation is modified.
6. ABC definition should be changed to a formal definition.
6. ABC definition is changed.
7. Literature review should be included the discussion on some of the advantages and disadvantages of existing methods.
7. Critical comments on the advantages and disadvantages are included in the literature review.
8. Definition of ABC throughout the thesis should be improved.
8. Definition of the ABC method is improved.
9. The choices of the ABC strategy need to be justified.
9. The choices of the ABC strategy is justified.
10. The regions of ABC need to be shaded.
10. The regions of the ABC are shaded.
11. Justify the ability of the derived method either comparing the derived method to an existing current method or some other way.
11. The ability of the derived methods is justified by comparing to the existing methods.
12. Clarify why all problems tested have no failure steps or include at least one problem which reports on the failure steps.
12. Two test problems that have failure steps are included.
13. Critical evaluation should be putted in the discussion of the results.
13. The discussion of the result included some critical evaluation.
14. Bibliography is inadequate.
14. Some references are added.
Thanks a lot...
1. Thesis topic is requested to be changed.
1. Thesis topic is changed.
2. Abstract is requires some slight modification.
2. Abstract is modified.
3. A sentence “ABC” need to cite the reference.
3. A sentence is cited.
4. Objectives are needs to rewrite.
4. Objectives are rewritten.
5. Scope and limitation is requires some slight modification.
5. Scope and limitation is modified.
6. ABC definition should be changed to a formal definition.
6. ABC definition is changed.
7. Literature review should be included the discussion on some of the advantages and disadvantages of existing methods.
7. Critical comments on the advantages and disadvantages are included in the literature review.
8. Definition of ABC throughout the thesis should be improved.
8. Definition of the ABC method is improved.
9. The choices of the ABC strategy need to be justified.
9. The choices of the ABC strategy is justified.
10. The regions of ABC need to be shaded.
10. The regions of the ABC are shaded.
11. Justify the ability of the derived method either comparing the derived method to an existing current method or some other way.
11. The ability of the derived methods is justified by comparing to the existing methods.
12. Clarify why all problems tested have no failure steps or include at least one problem which reports on the failure steps.
12. Two test problems that have failure steps are included.
13. Critical evaluation should be putted in the discussion of the results.
13. The discussion of the result included some critical evaluation.
14. Bibliography is inadequate.
14. Some references are added.
Top answer
". It's clearer and simpler to re-word these sentences to be more DIRECT, in ACTIVE VOICE, as instructions, such as "change something " or "rewrite Objectives". I tried to explain why these sentences are wrong, but I've also added my suggestion for re-wording the sentence using active voice.
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- It's clearer and simpler to re-word these sentences to be more DIRECT, in ACTIVE VOICE, as instructions, such as "change something " or "rewrite Objectives".
- I tried to explain why these sentences are wrong, but I've also added my suggestion for re-wording the sentence using active voice.
- ", but these words can be omitted if it's clear that you are giving instructions and you don't have to ask nicely.
- " at the start of each active voice suggestion that I have made.
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Most of these sentences are clumsily expressed because they are in PASSIVE VOICE, in other words they are of the form "a thing should be changed" or "the thing requires ...". It's clearer and simpler to re-word these sentences to be more DIRECT, in ACTIVE VOICE, as instructions, such as "change something" or "rewrite Objectives".
I tried to explain why these sentences are
I tried to explain why these sentences are
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