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00 A team of constestants has been assigned to guide a group of tourists around the city and 01 i 00 entertain them on a bus 02 i 00 . Steve is the leader and he 01 i 00 is in charge of providing the tourists information as the bus passes various landmarks in the city 02 i 00 . After a while, the team realize Steve is not doing a good job and another team member takes over his job and saves the day. 02 br
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00 I find the passage above unnatural but can't tell why. Some parts of it sound unnecessary or lack of information. For example "entertain them on a bus" sounds redundant because usually the word guide when used in tour contexts, implies providing information and most of the time some entertainment like jokes and etc. The only extra information is bus. Also, "in charge of providing information" sounds wordy and unelegant. I know there's no right or wrong when it comes to style. It's something learners and even native speakers learn over time. But I hope some comments will speed up the learning process. I would love to get some comments and suggestions. 02 br
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00 Thanks in advance. 02 br
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00 A team of constestants has been assigned to guide a group of tourists around the city and 01 i 00 entertain them on a bus 02 i 00 . Steve is the leader and he 01 i 00 is in charge of providing the tourists information as the bus passes various landmarks in the city 02 i 00 . After a while, the team realize Steve is not doing a good job and another team member takes over his job and saves the day. 02 br
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00 I find the passage above unnatural but can't tell why. Some parts of it sound unnecessary or lack of information. For example "entertain them on a bus" sounds redundant because usually the word guide when used in tour contexts, implies providing information and most of the time some entertainment like jokes and etc. The only extra information is bus. Also, "in charge of providing information" sounds wordy and unelegant. I know there's no right or wrong when it comes to style. It's something learners and even native speakers learn over time. But I hope some comments will speed up the learning process. I would love to get some comments and suggestions. 02 br
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00 Thanks in advance. 02 br
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0 Hi, 02 br 01 b 01 font 02 br 02 br 00 A team of constestants has been assigned to guide a group of tourists around the city and 01 i 00 entertain them on a bus 02 i 00 . Steve is the leader and he 01 i 00 is in charge of providing the tourists information as the bus passes various landmarks in the city 02 i 00 . After a while, the team realize Steve is not doing a good job and another team member takes over his job and saves the day.
- 0 Hi, 02 br 01 b 01 font 02 br 02 br 00 A team of constestants has been assigned to guide a group of tourists around the city and 01 i 00 entertain them on a bus 02 i 00 .
- Steve is the leader and he 01 i 00 is in charge of providing the tourists information as the bus passes various landmarks in the city 02 i 00 .
- After a while, the team realize Steve is not doing a good job and another team member takes over his job and saves the day.
- 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 I find the passage above unnatural but can't tell why.
- Some parts of it sound unnecessary or lack of information.
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0 Hi, 02 br
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00 A team of constestants has been assigned to guide a group of tourists around the city and 01 i 00 entertain them on a bus 02 i 00 . Steve is the leader and he 01 i 00 is in charge of providing the tourists information as the bus passes various landmarks in the city 02 i 00 .
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00 A team of constestants has been assigned to guide a group of tourists around the city and 01 i 00 entertain them on a bus 02 i 00 . Steve is the leader and he 01 i 00 is in charge of providing the tourists information as the bus passes various landmarks in the city 02 i 00 .
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0 Thanks, Clive. Yes, two teams are competing and the host will eliminate one of the members of the losing team like The Apprentice. 0-
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