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Hello everyone I'm new here.
Im from germany and I have to write a comment to the topic " Problems between parents and their children.
It would be nice if you correct my text and give me some ideas how to improve my text.

I came up with this.

Parents start with protecting their children, teaching them to talk and walk and do several other things, training them at every step to face the real world when they grow up and become independet self confident adults. But why there are still problems between children and there parents ? In my point of view this is a really good question !

Firstly i have to say that there are many problems but I like to pick up only two of the capital importance, in my opinion.

Lack of communication.
The biggest problem between children and their parents is the communication with each other. Parents often insult with their children when they make something wrongor do not obey(conform to rules). For instance your parents tell you to be back at home at 9 p.m. and you came back at 11 p.m., afterwards they insult with you why you dont come just in time. It is because they become anxious(Sorgen machen). Consenquently they spank you sometimes but only of the following reason . Parents love their children and parents have a responsibility for their children. Spanking is a powerfull method and helps children to improve, to grow up or preverse them for danger.

My second point I came up with is the right education. Parents try to share their knowledge and experience of life with their children, instead of listining to the parents children make the opposite. Let me give you an example from my self(experience). My parents told me quite a few times that smoking is unhealthy and bad. Nevertheless I smoked but ofter a while I noticed that my parents where absolutlely right with the statement. From this one can infer that your parents only want to protect your healthiness.

To sum up children have to listen to their parents and the other way around too. Parents have to talk with their children about there feelings to build(establish) a good connection to each other.