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0My daughter Penny wrote a short article, and I have corrected her grammatical errors. Yet, I'm not not sure if there are any I overlooked, so please edit and comment on it s.v.p.02br02br01font00MRT in Taipei02font02br02br01font00MRT is almost one of the most convenient transportations in Taipei. I took it before though it was a little crowded but it was really confortable. Why do may people like to take MRT? The following are my reasons.02font02br02br01font00First, it's fast. When we drive our cars and others drive theirs as we do, we have to be slow and careful not to bump into them. But MRT is different in that it can keep its own speed while running. So it doesn't have the similar problems as our cars do. Second, it's convenient. When we take MRT, we won't have the parking problems as our cars do. All of our cars, motorcycles, and even bicycles need a certain space to park. Last, it's very clean and comfortable. Its seats are very soft and tidy. Whenever I take it, I feel so comfortable that I almost fall asleep. With these good advantages, I believe MRT is going to be more useful and common for people in the future.02font0-

Clive · Accepted Answer

0Hi,02br
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00I've tried to keep your daughter's words as much as possible. Her writing is OK.01font00 02font00If she wants to continue to improve, tell her to read as much English as she can.05001font00 02font02br
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00Best wishes, Clive02br
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01font00MRT in Taipei02font02br
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01font00MRT is one of the most convenient methods of transportation in Taipei. I have taken it before. Although it was a little crowded, it was really comfortable. Why do many people like to take MRT? The following are my reasons.02font02br
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01font00First, it's fast. When we drive our cars and others drive theirs as we do, we have to be slow and careful not to bump into them. But MRT is different in that it can keep its own speed while running, so it doesn't have the same problems as our cars do. Second, it's convenient. When we take MRT, we don't have the parking problems as our cars do. All of our cars, motorcycles, and even bicycles need a certain space to park. Last, it's very clean and comfortable. Its seats are very soft and tidy. Whenever I take it, I feel so comfortable that I almost fall asleep. With these good advantages, I believe MRT is going to be more useful and common for people in the future.02font010id1

Angliholic · Answer

0 Thank you, Clive, for your kindness and advice. I'm sure to tell my daughter about your advice and kindness. 0-

NewPhilologist · Answer

0 Clive,02br
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00Do you think "to take MRT" is more common than "to take 01i00the 02i00MRT"? When I lived in Singapore, I always heard "take 01i00the 02i00MRT" 05002br
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00Best wishes,02br
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Clive · Answer

0Hi,02br
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00Such things are often idiomatic. It's ceratinly best to get advice from someone who has lived there.05002br
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