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Sailsofoblivion Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Comma placement?

This leads to the central conflict of the film when Randal undermines her authority on the ward, and shows the other men that a better life exists outside of their clinical routine as seen when he takes them fishing and brings alcohol into the hospital (with humorous results) – which are two of the most uplifting scenes in the film.

In this sentence, would I need a comma after fishing as it's a list?

Thanks in advance,
Emma
  

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sailsofoblivion In this sentence, would I need a comma after fishing as it's a list? It is not a list. A list requires 3 items at least.

— Mister Micawber

  • sailsofoblivion In this sentence, would I need a comma after fishing as it's a list?
  • It is not a list.
  • A list requires 3 items at least.
  • Otherwise, your punctuation is almost all misplaced.
  • This leads to the central conflict of the fil m, wh en Randal undermines her authority on the w ard an d shows the other men that a better life exists outside of their clinical routi ne, a s seen when he takes them fishing and brings alcohol into the hospital (with humorous results) – which are two of the most uplifting scenes in the film.
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sailsofoblivionIn this sentence, would I need a comma after fishing as it's a list?
It is not a list. A list requires 3 items at least. Otherwise, your punctuation is almost all misplaced.

This leads to the central conflict of the film, when Randal undermines her authority on the ward and shows the other men that a bet
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You are trying to cram too much into one sentence, and making it hard for the reader to follow your meaning.

I suggest this.
This leads to the central conflict of the film, when Randal undermines her authority on the ward and shows the other men that a better life exists outside of the
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