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Spooner Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Combining two ideas correctly
Hi. I am trying to combine the following two ideas.
1. Our colleges should have been an ivory tower that encourage students to pursue their studies.
Instead,
2. Our colleges have been an ivory tower that reacts sensitively to political changes.
And this is what I have come up with to the best of my ability.
My main focus has been trying to avoid using "an ivory tower" twice. BUT I am not sure whether it is grammatically correct.
"Our colleges have been an ivory tower that reacts sensitively to political changes
rather than allowing students to pursuit their studies."
And if it's, by any chance, correct, I want to know whether the underlined phrase accurately
has "an ivory tower" as its subject rather than "our colleges"
Top answer
There's nothing grammatically wrong with your suggested sentence but it doesn't really scan very well. Here's one possible way to phrase your thoughts: Our college has been acting more like a politically sensitive ivory tower than an educational institution where our students can pursue their studies.
- There's nothing grammatically wrong with your suggested sentence but it doesn't really scan very well.
- Here's one possible way to phrase your thoughts: Our college has been acting more like a politically sensitive ivory tower than an educational institution where our students can pursue their studies.
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There's nothing grammatically wrong with your suggested sentence but it doesn't really scan very well.
Here's one possible way to phrase your thoughts:
Our college has been acting more like a politically sensitive ivory tower than an educational institution where our students can pursue their studies.
Here's one possible way to phrase your thoughts:
Our college has been acting more like a politically sensitive ivory tower than an educational institution where our students can pursue their studies.
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Hi,
Because you are speaking of colleges in the plural, you need to speak of towers in the plural.
Because you are speaking of colleges in the plural, you need to speak of towers in the plural.
I am trying to combine the following two ideas.
1. Our colleges should have been an ivory tower that encourage students to pursue their studies.
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Thanks for your suggestion.
I like your first suggested sentence.
is there any way to not use the "ivory towers" twice?
Also, I have come up with another sentence of my own. Wonder how it sounds...
Our colleges have been ivory towers that only react sensitively to political changes, not the ivory towers that allow students pursue their studies.
I like your first suggested sentence.
is there any way to not use the "ivory towers" twice?
Also, I have come up with another sentence of my own. Wonder how it sounds...
Our colleges have been ivory towers that only react sensitively to political changes, not the ivory towers that allow students pursue their studies.
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Hi,
I like your first suggested sentence.
is there any way to not use the "ivory towers" twice? You could use my second sentence.
Also, I have come up with another sentence of my own. Wonder how it sounds... It's OK.
Our colleges have been ivory towers th
I like your first suggested sentence.
is there any way to not use the "ivory towers" twice? You could use my second sentence.
Also, I have come up with another sentence of my own. Wonder how it sounds... It's OK.
Our colleges have been ivory towers th
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IF it could be used in non-pejorative way, would the following sentence sound alright?
"Our colleges have been the ivory tower that reacts sensitively to political changes, not the ivory tower that allows students pursue their studies."
"Our colleges have been the ivory tower that reacts sensitively to political changes, not the ivory tower that allows students pursue their studies."
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Our colleges have been ivory towers that only react sensitively to political changes, not --the-- ivory towers that allow students to pursue their studies.
Are you saying "the" should be taken out?
Are you saying "the" should be taken out?
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Hi,
Our colleges have been ivory towers that only react sensitively to political changes, not --the-- ivory towers that allow students to pursue their studies.
Are you saying "the" should be taken out?
Yes. The crossing-out function on the Forum does not seem to work.
Our colleges have been ivory towers that only react sensitively to political changes, not --the-- ivory towers that allow students to pursue their studies.
Are you saying "the" should be taken out?
Yes. The crossing-out function on the Forum does not seem to work.
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Hi,
IF it could be used in non-pejorative way, would the following sentence sound alright?
"Our colleges have been the ivory tower that reacts sensitively to political changes, not the ivory tower that allows students pursue their studies."
No, definitely not.
Cl
IF it could be used in non-pejorative way, would the following sentence sound alright?
"Our colleges have been the ivory tower that reacts sensitively to political changes, not the ivory tower that allows students pursue their studies."
No, definitely not.
Cl
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