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Sunflower Posted 22 years ago
Medical & Dental Studies
Clinical paper - Correction of three paragraphs!
Hello everybody!
I am writing a case report and I really need your help correcting these three paragraphs for me? Would you take a look and make some suggestions to improve the text? I appreciate any assistance!
The panoramic radiograph also evidenced that several teeth that should already have completed root formation still exhibited incomplete apical closure, which evidenced a delayed
dental formation in relation to the patient’s chronological age. Generalized diastemas were noticed in the mandibular dental arch whereas the lack of space in the maxillary dental arch resulted in crowding of the left canines and premolars.
Because of (due to) the clinical signs of temporomandibular dysfunction, including malocclusion, painful symptomatology on palpation of the facial and masticatory muscles accompanied by headaches episodes (referred to at the first consultation as the medical history was gathered/taken), additional sessions were scheduled for occlusal adjustment combined with electromyographic analysis. This therapeutic approach was carried out at moments other than those of acute dysfunctional manifestations and attempted to yield an immediate occlusal stabilization and consequent comfort to the temporomandibular joints.
The patients have attended to three-monthly recalls for clinical and radiographic assessment of general oral health status, as well for making a decision as to the best surgical and anesthetic managements to be rendered for removal of the unerupted, horizontally impacted teeth. The panoramic radiographs revealed that, in both patients, the alveolar ridge had small dimensions between the base of the mandible and the alveolar crest, and that the ascending rami of the mandible appeared narrowed in an anteroposterior direction. The thinness of the hypoplastic mandible dramatically increases the risk of accidental fracturing during surgery. Difficulties arising from the patients’ oromaxillofacial features (microstomia, limited mouth opening, muscular stiffness and rigidity of the temporomandibular joints), possible damages to the adjacent anatomical structures during extractions as well as the potential anesthetic risk of malignant hyperthermia and difficulty in endotracheal intubation (in the event general anesthesia appears as the most indicated anesthetic approach) have been weighed against the likelihood of development of dentigerous cysts or ankylosis, resulting from delayed surgical removal of the impacted teet
I am writing a case report and I really need your help correcting these three paragraphs for me? Would you take a look and make some suggestions to improve the text? I appreciate any assistance!
The panoramic radiograph also evidenced that several teeth that should already have completed root formation still exhibited incomplete apical closure, which evidenced a delayed
dental formation in relation to the patient’s chronological age. Generalized diastemas were noticed in the mandibular dental arch whereas the lack of space in the maxillary dental arch resulted in crowding of the left canines and premolars.
Because of (due to) the clinical signs of temporomandibular dysfunction, including malocclusion, painful symptomatology on palpation of the facial and masticatory muscles accompanied by headaches episodes (referred to at the first consultation as the medical history was gathered/taken), additional sessions were scheduled for occlusal adjustment combined with electromyographic analysis. This therapeutic approach was carried out at moments other than those of acute dysfunctional manifestations and attempted to yield an immediate occlusal stabilization and consequent comfort to the temporomandibular joints.
The patients have attended to three-monthly recalls for clinical and radiographic assessment of general oral health status, as well for making a decision as to the best surgical and anesthetic managements to be rendered for removal of the unerupted, horizontally impacted teeth. The panoramic radiographs revealed that, in both patients, the alveolar ridge had small dimensions between the base of the mandible and the alveolar crest, and that the ascending rami of the mandible appeared narrowed in an anteroposterior direction. The thinness of the hypoplastic mandible dramatically increases the risk of accidental fracturing during surgery. Difficulties arising from the patients’ oromaxillofacial features (microstomia, limited mouth opening, muscular stiffness and rigidity of the temporomandibular joints), possible damages to the adjacent anatomical structures during extractions as well as the potential anesthetic risk of malignant hyperthermia and difficulty in endotracheal intubation (in the event general anesthesia appears as the most indicated anesthetic approach) have been weighed against the likelihood of development of dentigerous cysts or ankylosis, resulting from delayed surgical removal of the impacted teet
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Your sentences are much too long for your own ability to translate. The first two paragraphs made more readable are as follows: The panoramic radiograph also showed that several teeth which should already have completed root formation, still exhibited incomplete apical closure demonstrating a delayed dental formation in relation to the patient’s chronological age. Generalized diastemas were noticed in the mandibular dental arch whereas the lack of space in the maxillary dental arch resulted in crowding of the left canines and premolars.
- Your sentences are much too long for your own ability to translate.
- The first two paragraphs made more readable are as follows: The panoramic radiograph also showed that several teeth which should already have completed root formation, still exhibited incomplete apical closure demonstrating a delayed dental formation in relation to the patient’s chronological age.
- Generalized diastemas were noticed in the mandibular dental arch whereas the lack of space in the maxillary dental arch resulted in crowding of the left canines and premolars.
- Because of the clinical signs of temporomandibular dysfunction, including malocclusion, pain on palpation of the facial and masticatory muscles, accompanied by episodic headaches (referred to at the first consultation when the medical history was taken), additional sessions were scheduled for occlusal adjustment combined with electromyographic analysis.
- This therapeutic approach was carried out at times other than those of acute dysfunctional manifestations and was attempted to yield an immediate occlusal stabilization of and consequent comfort to the temporomandibular joints.
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Your sentences are much too long for your own ability to translate. The first two paragraphs made more readable are as follows:
The panoramic radiograph also showed that several teeth which should already have completed root formation, still exhibited incomplete apical closure demonstrating a delayed
dental formation in relation to the patient’s chronological age. Generalized dias
The panoramic radiograph also showed that several teeth which should already have completed root formation, still exhibited incomplete apical closure demonstrating a delayed
dental formation in relation to the patient’s chronological age. Generalized dias
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Dear MCJB,
I really appreciate your attention and your commnents on my essay. i will take your suggestions. Any suggestion is helpful to improving my wrtiting skills. I also found the sentences in third paragraphs too long, but I still did not find the way to write them any shorter.... If I try to rewrite the last paragraph and post later would you please take a look for me? Thanks for
I really appreciate your attention and your commnents on my essay. i will take your suggestions. Any suggestion is helpful to improving my wrtiting skills. I also found the sentences in third paragraphs too long, but I still did not find the way to write them any shorter.... If I try to rewrite the last paragraph and post later would you please take a look for me? Thanks for
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