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A World Without electricity would be a world without computers, phones, lights, TV, radio, and many others.|| And it would be very dark in the streets at night|| as there would be no street lamps|| and many accidents would occur|| from cars having no lights at night|| (if we found an alternative to electric car batteries of course!)|| We would probably not have planes|| because we wouldn’t have computer navigating systems|| and we wouldn’t have radar either.|| Computer games consoles wouldn’t exist,|| people couldn’t type things on computers|| (like I am now)|| or use computers for work.|| Can you imagine it?|| Computers not existing would mean|| no way of storing data|| and everything would be in paper,|| cameras wouldn’t exist,|| and of course, there would be no internet!!!||

People would probably cook their food on open fires|| and most food would be homemade.|| There wouldn’t be any factories|| to mass produce things||like processed food, ready meals, metal cans, plastic wrapping, and lots of other stuff.|| This would mean|| there would be less fizzy drinks, canned food, sweets, ready-made food,|| and most shops would probably make their products by hand.|| They wouldn’t have any fridges or freezers|| as they use electricity and food|| like meat would have to be salted|| to be preserved and other food, like bread, would have to be stored in a pantry.||

And how would we travel?|| We would probably not have any planes|| but we might still have air ships as an alternative to planes|| and our trains would all still be steam powered.|| But over the last 100 years of no electricity, steam trains and airships would have probably been improved a fair amount, such as navigating systems for airships and faster steam trains.|| We may still have cars|| but they would probably be wound up by hand|| like they were|| when people invented them years ago.|| For entertainment people would probably read lots more books|| and play lots more instruments.|| There would be a ton of live acoustic instruments||but there would be no rock and roll!|| There may well be a cinema,|| just instead of using electricity to project the film|| it would have a man|| turning a handle,|| or a donkey walking in circles outside!|| We would have more artists|| and with the lack of TV, video game consoles, and computers children would go outside a lot more|| and get a lot more exercise.|| So that would probably be healthier.||

So, all in all, the world would probably be a much greener place without electricity|| as people would travel by car less|| and we wouldn’t have factories|| pumping Co2 into the air|| and it would be a very steam engine style world|| where there wouldn’t be any food from other countries|| due to transportation being harder|| and our cinemas would be donkey powered!|| But, while we’d have a lack of items|| that we use in everyday life,|| the world would be a very clean, steamy, healthy place.|| So we should try using less electricity!||