Check this sentence for me please

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"Therefore, not only can the system supply high power light as a lighting system, it can also supply a broadband link for the wireless communication."

Can you tell me if my sentence is correct. I want to talk about a system that untertake two function: illuminating and communication. With the illuminating function, my system can supply high power light. With the communication function, my system can supply a broadbank link. Does my sentence express correctly my idea? Or can you fix it for me.

Thank you!

Spikey One · Accepted Answer

Is your system composed of wires or optical fibre or a cable containing both? I suspect the first option.

I also assume your system requires additional light sources and a wireless router or are they part of the system?

If only wires then: Therefore, not only can the system supply power for lighting, it also acts as a broadband link for (the) wireless data communications.

If only optical fibre: Therefore, not only can the system supply lighting, it also acts as a broadband link for (the)wireless data communications.

If a combination of wires and optical fibre: Therefore, not only can the system supply electrical power for lighting, it also acts as a broadband fibre optical link for (the) wireless data communications.

Note: Include "the" depending on your meaning. If the wireless system is one in particular then "the" is required. If you are talking about any wireless systeml, "the" is not required.

James do · Answer

thank you very much!

My system is a visible light communication system. In my system, the light radiated from white LEDs will supply light as a lighting system. And the information will be transfered through the light. That's why I said my system undertake both function: illumination and communication.

I don't know but it seems that your sentence doesn't express exactly my idea. I have to emphasize that my system can supply both "high power lighting" and "broadband link" because that is the advantage of my system. I also have to emphasize that my system undertake both functions.

Can you give me other option.

Spikey One · Answer

You are correct. There are many words and to find the best words for your purpose can difficult. You are looking to paint a picture with words and every word has a slightly different meaning to everyone. You know your audience best. I will give a few more options below. You can of course recombine or change the various phrases.

This system delivers powerful yet efficient lighting while simultaneously performing as a high speed broadband wireless communications link.

This system delivers bright pleasant room lighting while simultaneously acting as a high speed broadband wireless communications link.

The system supples powerful lighting using solid state lamps and simultaneously acts as a wireless broadband communications link.

The common infrastructure of this system delivers efficient bright lighting while providing a wireless broadband communications link.

I like the words powerful, efficient and simultaneous (at the same time), so my preference is the first sentence shown.

Good luck.

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