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Avidlearner Posted 13 years ago
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We have seen the green revolution and the white revolution, which contributed to food grain production and efficient use as well as availability of milk respectively.
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Dear teachers, please check this sentence.
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Hi Avid, It's perfectly grammatical, but a bit confusing. So I can't correct it, but I can improve it. I would use commas to make it a bit easier to parse.
- Hi Avid, It's perfectly grammatical, but a bit confusing.
- So I can't correct it, but I can improve it.
- I would use commas to make it a bit easier to parse.
- Dispense with "as well as"; it makes it more confusing, not less.
- We have seen the green revolution and the white revolution, which contributed to food grain production, and efficient use and availability of milk respectively.
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Hi Avid,
It's perfectly grammatical, but a bit confusing. So I can't correct it, but I can improve it. I would use commas to make it a bit easier to parse. Dispense with "as well as"; it makes it more confusing, not less.
It's perfectly grammatical, but a bit confusing. So I can't correct it, but I can improve it. I would use commas to make it a bit easier to parse. Dispense with "as well as"; it makes it more confusing, not less.
We have seen the green revolution and the white revolution, which contributed to food grain production, and efficient use and availability of milk
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