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Essay & Composition Writing
Check my narrative essay please, and tell me if there is a grammar mistakes on it.
I was asked to write a narrative essay about one event in my highschool that affect my personality.
Unforgettable Highschool’s Camping
In my old school in Indonesia, I had many school programs, but there was one program that really changed me. It’s a yearly program and I am greatly affected by it. The program was called camping. It was two-nights and three-days of wild experience. I got frustrated at first, but then I got the hang of it.
When I was about to go to the camping grounds, I was given a booklet. In this booklet, there were several explanations and pictures about the camping grounds. It was described that the place was clean, and there were plenty of water and trees. I felt really excited about that place, and I could not wait to stay there. Finally, I went to that place by bus and I just noticed that the camping ground was called Lembean. After arriving in Lembean, I was really surprised because this place was not good at all. It didn’t have a lot of water and it was very hot. From being really excited, my mood was changed 360 degree, but I tried to think positively. Then, we were divided into group, and in my group, I was assigned to be the leader. As a leader, I told my members to put up their tent, and set a cooking area. After that, I fried some chicken nugget for our group and we ate it together. In the mean time, me and my members were called to attend the opening ceremony. After the opening ceremony, I played several fun games. I got mud all over me, and when I wanted to take a bath, the water was not enough. I really wanna get mad at that time. Luckily, I found a well, and I tried to get enough water for me to shower. After taking bath, me and my members ate dinner together and immediately went to sleep after dinner. I felt so tired on the first day.
In the morning of the second day, I woke my members up. I made breakfast and told my members to eat it. After having breakfast, I had morning aerobic with all of the students and the next activity was playing games. The games were all about teamworks, and I had to work together with my members to play. After having all of those games, me and my members were given time to take a shower and ate dinner. At last, me and all of other students had a wonderful bonfire night. At that night, our school had a talent show, and it was a compulsory program. In other words, each group must perform a talent like singing, dancing, or drama. As a leader, I asked my members to choose what our group will perform. They chose to sing later on. We only had a little time to practice. Finally, my group successfully sang a Bruno Mars song which is entitled “When I was your man”. Even though we only had a little time for practicing, my group got a reward for the best group singer. I felt so proud with my group.
On the third day, which was also the last day of the camping, we had hiking. I went to the forest and something terrible happened to me. The path was very steep, and slippery. Horrifyingly I fell down, and I got blistered all over me. Not only my clothes got muddy, but my face also got muddy. I almost cried, and when the senior came, I was very embarrassed. My body was so weak at that time, so the seniors carried me back to the camp. They helped me to clean my wound and put some alcohol on it. Because I was wounded, someone else had to cook. So, one of my members named Tati cooked for us. After eating, all of the students were gathered to attend the closing ceremony. In the closing ceremony, there was an awarding, and I got awarded as “Favorite Leader”. I was helped by my members to stand and take the award. I was very happy and proud of myself. Also, I told my members that having these three days experience was one of the best time of my life. They hugged me tightly. Later on, we cleaned up our place and went home. Therefore, this camping taught many lessons to me, especially in my personality. It taught me to be a good leader, to be independent, and to work together with other people.
Unforgettable Highschool’s Camping
In my old school in Indonesia, I had many school programs, but there was one program that really changed me. It’s a yearly program and I am greatly affected by it. The program was called camping. It was two-nights and three-days of wild experience. I got frustrated at first, but then I got the hang of it.
When I was about to go to the camping grounds, I was given a booklet. In this booklet, there were several explanations and pictures about the camping grounds. It was described that the place was clean, and there were plenty of water and trees. I felt really excited about that place, and I could not wait to stay there. Finally, I went to that place by bus and I just noticed that the camping ground was called Lembean. After arriving in Lembean, I was really surprised because this place was not good at all. It didn’t have a lot of water and it was very hot. From being really excited, my mood was changed 360 degree, but I tried to think positively. Then, we were divided into group, and in my group, I was assigned to be the leader. As a leader, I told my members to put up their tent, and set a cooking area. After that, I fried some chicken nugget for our group and we ate it together. In the mean time, me and my members were called to attend the opening ceremony. After the opening ceremony, I played several fun games. I got mud all over me, and when I wanted to take a bath, the water was not enough. I really wanna get mad at that time. Luckily, I found a well, and I tried to get enough water for me to shower. After taking bath, me and my members ate dinner together and immediately went to sleep after dinner. I felt so tired on the first day.
In the morning of the second day, I woke my members up. I made breakfast and told my members to eat it. After having breakfast, I had morning aerobic with all of the students and the next activity was playing games. The games were all about teamworks, and I had to work together with my members to play. After having all of those games, me and my members were given time to take a shower and ate dinner. At last, me and all of other students had a wonderful bonfire night. At that night, our school had a talent show, and it was a compulsory program. In other words, each group must perform a talent like singing, dancing, or drama. As a leader, I asked my members to choose what our group will perform. They chose to sing later on. We only had a little time to practice. Finally, my group successfully sang a Bruno Mars song which is entitled “When I was your man”. Even though we only had a little time for practicing, my group got a reward for the best group singer. I felt so proud with my group.
On the third day, which was also the last day of the camping, we had hiking. I went to the forest and something terrible happened to me. The path was very steep, and slippery. Horrifyingly I fell down, and I got blistered all over me. Not only my clothes got muddy, but my face also got muddy. I almost cried, and when the senior came, I was very embarrassed. My body was so weak at that time, so the seniors carried me back to the camp. They helped me to clean my wound and put some alcohol on it. Because I was wounded, someone else had to cook. So, one of my members named Tati cooked for us. After eating, all of the students were gathered to attend the closing ceremony. In the closing ceremony, there was an awarding, and I got awarded as “Favorite Leader”. I was helped by my members to stand and take the award. I was very happy and proud of myself. Also, I told my members that having these three days experience was one of the best time of my life. They hugged me tightly. Later on, we cleaned up our place and went home. Therefore, this camping taught many lessons to me, especially in my personality. It taught me to be a good leader, to be independent, and to work together with other people.
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