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Things I like about chemeketa

I like Chemeketa for many reason. First, the school is very big and very clean. Then, every building has computer that everyone could use. The Chemeketa's cafeteria was very good too.They have lot's of choices and the food was very goo. And when you meet the teachers, they're very nice and they always gave you hope to be successful someday. Finally, those reasons makes me like my school very much and having fun while I'm here.

please check my grammar.. I know I have lot's of mistake please
help me to correct it.. Thank you so much

Canadian45 · Accepted Answer

mAindy
Things I like about Chemeketa

I like Chemeketa for many reasons. First, the school is very big and very clean. ~~Then~~ Also, every building has computers that everyone ~~could~~ can use. ~~The~~ Chemeketa's cafeteria ~~was~~ is very good too. They have ~~lot's~~ lots of choices and the food ~~was~~ is very good.

~~And when you meet~~ The teachers ~~they're~~ are very nice and they always ~~gave~~ give you hope (to be)(of bring) successful someday.

~~Finally,~~ Those are the reasons ~~makes me~~ I like my school very much and am having fun ~~while I'm~~ here.

Please check my grammar. I know I have l~~ot's~~ lots of mistakes. Please help me (to) correct it them. Thank you so much!

Hoangnam2008 · Answer

I like Chemeketa for many reason. First, the school is very big and very clean. Then, every building has computer that everyone could use. The Chemeketa's cafeteria was very good too.They have lot's of choices and the food was very goo (why do u use 'goo' here?). And when you meet the teachers, they're very nice and they always gave you hope to be successful someday. Finally, those reasons makes me like my school very much and having fun while I'm here.

I'm not a teacher ^^ Just a English student, too. It's just my opinion.
Is Chemeketa a school's name?
I suggest this paragraph should be:

I like Chemeketa for many reasons. Firstly, this school is very big and clean. Secondly, every room has computers for students. The Chemeketa's cafeteria is very good, too. It has a variety of food and the food is very delicious. In addition, teachers in Chemeketa are very nice and they always encourage me, giving me motivations to achieve my goals. For these reasons, I feel happy when I study here and I really love my school.

Canadian45 · Answer

...give you hope of 'being' successful...

not "bring" successful

For some reason, the time for editing was very short.

Canadian45 · Answer

Hi hoangnam2008. Welcome to the forums!

I have some sugestions for you. I hope you don't mind.

When we are asked to correct someone's writing, we should only change things that are not good English or that are factually incorrect. If we change things that were not incorrect, the writer may think that they were incorrect.

We should never change the writers meaning when it is clearly and logically expressed! We have no right to do that. For example, the writer said that every building has computers, not every room.

Also, there is nothing wrong with "lots of choices" and "food...very good", which you changed. And there are other parts that you changed.

Remember that it is the writer's article, not ours.

Of course, there often are some things we can change, even if they are not strictly incorrect. Maybe the writer is using too many words to say something that can be said more efficiently. Or maybe they are using too many short sentences or too long sentences that can be improved. Making changes like that can help the writer improve their writing style.

Hoangnam2008 · Answer

Thank you Canadian, I got it. Sorry for my mistakes

Anonymous · Answer

Hi

Things I like about Chemeketa

I like ~~Chemeketa~~(it) for many reasons. First, ~~the~~(its) school is very big and very clean. ~~Then,~~(Also) every building has computers that everyone could(can) use. ~~The~~ Chemeketa's cafeteria ~~was~~ (is) very good, too.They have ~~lot's~~ (lots)of choices and ~~the~~(its) food ~~was~~(is) very good. ~~And~~ when you meet the teachers, they're very nice and ~~they~~ always ~~gave~~(give) you hope to be successful someday. Finally, ~~those~~(these/the) reasons makes me like my school very much and ~~having~~ (have)fun .while I'm here.

please check my grammar.. I know I have ~~lot's~~(lots) of mistakes please

help me to correct it(them).. Thank you so much

MAindy · Answer

Thank you for the correction..

MAindy · Answer

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MAindy · Answer

thank you for the correction..

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